Open Poetry #44 |
The Crystal Rose |
Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
In a grotto of the farthest north A roseate light glows Flowering amidst desolate stone A crystalline red rose Begotten from a goddess' tears Shed from high above Within those perfect scarlet blooms Lies the seed of all love Holds every secret heartfelt wish In it's pellucid gleam Holds the truth and holds the light And every romantics dream The rose is cursed to bear the weight Of every tragedy borne Of every selfless sacrifice Of every true love mourned With every tear a lover weeps A petal falls to the ground To land upon unyielding earth And smash without a sound If we can never stem the tide Of bitter tears we cry If true love cannot triumph then The rose will surely die Far north of this grieving sphere Petals fall like rain Until at last in sympathy The goddess weeps again written for 'Crystal Rose' Shannon, my beloved. [This message has been edited by Suncleaver (01-29-2009 03:32 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Luke, thank you. This means a lot to me, just now. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I love your ending...such a neat twist of the thought processes...yet so pleasant at the same time...nicely done oh, btw...welcome to PiP...almost forgot |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
quote: This stanza is very Beautiful thank you for shareing Over all the poem is excellence in print, Bravo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so lovely... Welcome to Passions! |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Okay so after reading your comment on my poem I thought it would be only fair to give you one in return. But once I stumble onto the piece of magic you left me speechless. I'm serious when I say you have a talent that gives me the urge to write. Well what can I say? Some wait to be inspired. And I guess I'm just one of them. Thanks for being my Muse. lol. -Zach When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you. |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Cheers Zach. This was written for my beloved one and she loves the replies. Bill Charles, Earth Angel and XxForever.BrokenxX inspire me to write better poetry, so into the fray I wade, thesaurus in hand. :p Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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AAB Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 99Canada |
Absolutly amazing. lets hope we can keep the goddess from weeping. "Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride |
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