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Tripped Up
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Tripped Up |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Tripped Up you’re an empty suitcase traveling on a trip to no where I could cry but I have spent all of my tears on more imitation silk lining covered thin the outside of never being right weak in the schedule of timing tracks boarded to boredom map pinned carefully I was here and grip that bears your name alone but alone is so different than lonely red light, green light, a ticket to ride pack yourself up and go, I’ll wave "I'm so hard to handle |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I guess you told Somebody, Helen. Ida |
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Billie Cullimore Member
since 2009-03-27
Posts 315 |
You my dear, need a hug, here you are BIG HUG Billie C. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
"and grip that bears your name alone but alone is so different than lonely" One thing that I really liked out of it all. Alone and lonely, yes, one of the hardest lessons I had to learn of life, really. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
but alone is so different than lonely Amen! And being lonely when you're not even alone is the worst. Wonderful write... I'll wave with you! *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
alllllllllllllllll aboard? *smiling* You are feisty. I LOVE feisty!  last line powerpunch, love it.  |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Helen, I loved your ending strophe. Love Bobby |
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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk |
interesting how it all comes to not really caring if one leaves or stays, but what do we really mean inside I don't know but sometimes we are too in a rush to get our feelings out we stumble over the closest wordings. RedStone |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
You see anything in my responses today! It's Helen day! Just can't seem to get enough of you...as if I ever could... j. |
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Osprey Member
since 2009-04-12
Posts 249 |
Ballsy; I love it. But only be sure you love the back and are not hoping for a turn of the head. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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