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To Not Weep Alone
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To Not Weep Alone |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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To Not Weep Alone In the Yesterday, I planted a Willow, A tree to share my moments, sad. Not wanting to weep alone again Of losses deep, of what once had.... Beneath her branches, long and dangling I'd sit and contemplate each word, Those desires never sharing Or mine that never had been heard... The swaying back and forth would calm me, Allowing peacefulness to reign. Leaning 'gainst the tree, my Willow, I'd myst the dreams, that would remain. ~~~~~~~~~~ I'd medicate myself in thought And walk that path, my history. The grounds of which I planted seed, Imprinted mine, artistically. Sometimes imprisoned, segments lost, I'd feel the end of consciousness. Until I rose in wealth of self, A process needed to address Those just of one, of only me, As eyes took view of all before; The petals e'er lasting, pink, The black-eyed daisies, I'd adore, The arbor, over/under spread With flowers opened wide, so pale. Soaking in the warmth of day While walking through the latticed veil. I'd wander 'round, pass by the pond Reflecting thoughts in face I'd see, The ripples when I fed the fish, As they returned in greet of me. The weeping willow once newly raised, Still bending as the breezes blow In fragileness, continues change As strength regains, in each years grow. I fed my mind on natures gifts And settled on the swing of thoughts, Suspending judgement of my life Revering all my eyes had caught. No tears to sting, no frowns to face When mirrored in the glass of time. Today, I cherished with respect The path once walked, those thoughts in rhyme. ~~~~~~~ Embraced for just a moment now Beneath that special willow tree Bent a bit too much towards right Again, a weeping time for me... M [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (05-17-2009 04:26 AM).] |
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XOx Uriah xOX Senior Member
since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403Virginia |
pure poetry haikus come to mind by Chiyo-ni I beleve something like... "a green willow's quiet wherever you plant it" and "to tangle or untangle the willow--- it's up to the wind" ::smiles:: |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Being a former pond keeper/gardener I can sure relate to the soothing solitude brought into a sombre afternoon  enjoyed |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Applause!!! Beautiful,sad and so well done. I can relate to your thoughts. Regards. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
written on the willows words across the breeze may your heart flutter with the gentle light |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a fine 'write' ! I am especially fond of the last part of it: "I fed my mind on natures gifts And settled on the swing of thoughts, Suspending judgement of my life Revering all my eyes had caught. No tears to sting, no frowns to face When mirrored in the glass of time. Today, I cherished with respect The path once walked, those thoughts in rhyme. ~~~~~~~ Embraced for just a moment now Beneath that special willow tree Bent a bit too much towards right Again, a weeping time for me..." much applause!! |
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Marcia MT Junior Member
since 2009-05-15
Posts 36California USA |
Loud applause!!! A totally brilliant write that had me wandering along with you. When a poet makes you feel as though you are part of what inspired the poem that is genius. You did that. You are that. BRAVO! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
poetress you shine |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Nakdthoughts, This is a nice tree poem. However, why weep at all. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I love the imagery that this one portrays...especially words like these: "I'd feel the end of consciousness. Until I rose in wealth of self" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"However, why weep at all" I weep... for the unexpected, impending loss of my brother-in-law who is suffering with a cancer that keeps him from speaking. I weep... for my nephews who are now losing their father to the same cancer that took their mother (my sister) nearly five years ago. I weep... for the selfish loneliness within as I lose another close to me knowing that this cycle is only in its beginning And though they have had good lives I weep with our memories and wonder my reason for being and how to make the rest of my life worthwhile. ~~~ Bobby, some people are extremely sensitive and emotional and caring... maybe overly so. I am one of those, sometimes to my dismay. Thank you for reading and the kind responses as I/we await the inevitable. M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh M, I am so sorry... maybe you are to be here for your nephews..maybe that is your purpose. You are a nurturing soul, and I suspect that is what they need. Much love  and the poem was beautiful.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Susan, David passed away at 4:00 this afternoon with all of us there. Yesterday he could tease non-verbally and joke and smile...today he was there in spirit only waiting for his last breath to be taken. M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, my friend... Your words are so beautiful... both in your poem and response... I was already close to weeping with you before I read your last post. I am so very very sorry for your loss... my thoughts and prayers are with you and your nephews and all those who loved David. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i am so sorry for your loss |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hugging you tight |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
nakdthoughts - I give my hand to you, for it's strength... BC |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Thoughts of love and understanding. Mere words sound so hollow. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
my breath stops, my heart cries, my tears begin where yours could flow no more, and I hug you with arms that span the space between us. Your love is palpable, my friend, and I cry with you your tears.... Jimmy |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Maureen, this is so sad. I understand where you are coming from. I am always here, if you should ever need me. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you for your kind thoughts and support. Been a tough week. I am going to take a short break to tend to some of life's necessities. Thanks again,  M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I just ran across this, and it reminded me of you, and this poem. (And yes, drat me, I lost your e mail addy again) But knowing your love of nature and design, I thought you'd appreciate the beautiful art of this stair railway: http://bp2.blogger.com/_opptvFBa4ck/R_JiZikU2-I/AAAAAAAABBI/A_QyTRxQ1ro/s1600-h/ImagTreeRailing.jpg How awesome is THAT? Hope it made you smile, dearheart. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Tears at your poem, your loss, your family's loss, your hurts, Maureen. Hugs where it hurts most Owl |
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