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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Intended complimentary they stood before me and proclaimed, "She's pretty." "No, she's beautiful." I stared at them from miles away... as if I were in a window dressed for the pedestrian, objectified as mannequin with silks and pearls and sparklings arranged in lines of hide the truth... as one of them reached out to me to feel the sparkle in the crease of my eyes - bedazzling? He blushed and then he spoke direct: "I thought that those were tears." He smiled. I told him that my tears had dried long ago; so now I glue tiny little stars of truth in the corners of my blues wide, and wild and wishing youth that honors me and honesty-- without mascara gloss and rouge-- naked, but for lies. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*nodding* I know... Here is what is funny about crying for me now...I don't cry when I am hurt anymore...but I will cry over a dog dying in a movie... I kiss your stars  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh, the twinkling needs no war paint, beautiful woman. Flex those biceps, and show 'em truth or consequences ~Grin. This was extraordinary. You flow down the page like tears of joy.  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"youth that honors me and honesty-- without mascara gloss and rouge-- naked, but for lies." ...so beautiful, I am sure that this could even stand alone...and such a lovely image from its innocence...nicely done |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
AHHHH! You kill me, lady. You know, your work is really profound. I am there, you have been there. You're telling me where I am going. That's great. This is great. |
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SeraphimBroken Member
since 2009-03-09
Posts 74USA |
I very much enjoyed this! |
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Grinch Member Elite
since 2005-12-31
Posts 2929Whoville |
I enjoyed reading this. I knew I would before I read it; there are little clues that make certain poems stand out, the biggest one being the name of the poet. I see yours and I know I’m in for a treat. I wasn’t disappointed. A critique? ok - it's not in a book and it should be. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You always take me into your world, Karen. Such is your genius. Ida |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Genius. Yep, I'll second that! Beautifully expressed, Karen! |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I love it and you! You're always so very refreshing to read, Karen. I agree, that it's no doubt your genius sparkling! God bless, Rae |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Um, I've been getting out more, and wowswers, I can even remember where I've been at the end of the night.  I thank you all kindly for the generosity of your praise--and prepare yourself--I have been collecting writing material. *shaking my head* people...inspire me. Much love to you all. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
as one of them reached out to me to feel the sparkle in the crease of my eyes - bedazzling? If he'd only known... the real sparkle lies softly folded in your heart. *S* I could copy so many of your lines... but you know what you wrote so I'll just say... breathtaking. *S* And I hope your people keep inspiring so I can inhale your words. *S* |
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