Open Poetry #44 |
Redemption (sonnet) |
Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Redemption On high in night-time watch the stars were spread, The mournful howling wind began to swirl, Rain, it echoed darkened tears I had shed, In sorrow deep I begged to death 'unfurl!' Yet thrice did heaven scorn the lachrymose, In woe I walked across the land in shame, My fate, I authored blood upon a rose, And velvet whisperings of lust my name. Yet Venus cried, divinity begat The gentle one to touch my heart and hopes, She reached her hand where gods and men had spat, The voice was hers that bade me shed my ropes And gave the flight unto my earthbound heart, The tender solace did her touch impart. Dedicated to A Romantic Heart When I see your face all the angels are shamed. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Suncleaver, This sonnet works very well. It's well written. Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Luke, This is a sweet and thought filled write. well done, Tracey |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
its romamtic with a sweet touch |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suncleaver - very nice write, enjoyed reading it... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Luke, I am truly happy that you have found the "tender solace" that you so richly deserve. You write of it with grace and gratitude. With much affection, Your friend, Linda |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
So sorry I am late responding, as we talked about in chat, I was away to help my friend with her mothers funeral. But what a happy gift do i find awaiting me as I return, a beautiful love song, wrapped with the sweetest love.... I have missed you! Warm Love, ~ARH |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
So sorry I am late responding, as we talked about in chat, I was away to help my friend with her mothers funeral. But what a happy gift do i find awaiting me as I return, a beautiful love song, wrapped with the sweetest love.... I have missed you! Warm Love, ~ARH |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well written sonnet. Beautiful expression. Eric |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
effective sonnet ... fine ending: "And gave the flight unto my earthbound heart, The tender solace did her touch impart(!)" applause!! |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Wonderful dedication to ARH! ARCTIC WIND |
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