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JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2009-04-29 06:42 PM

Someone You Care For

I met her in a train station
in the early parts of a Sunday night
and she appeared to be such a delight
that I ask her if she'd have some tea with me.
"Of course" she said, but halfheartedly,
which led me to doubt her sincerity;
but tea we did share
in a little cafe
not far from there.
Over tea I sensed a troubled soul
and perhaps a broken heart,
so as she spoke
I searched within my heart
to find the words I could say
to help her pain soothe away,
but I couldn't find
the right words to say
so I simply took her
hand into my hand,
hoping that she would understand
that I had lost someone too.

JamesLee
28April
2009

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2009-04-29 06:48 PM

Sinlence from an understanding and caring heart usually works better than mis guided words from one who doesn't relate. I say you did quite well and I know you did with the write. Enjoyed.

SeraphimBroken
Member

since 2009-03-09

Posts 74
USA

2 posted 2009-04-29 06:54 PM

Nice indeed! Sometimes more than most, a hand to hold speaks the only words that can be spoken, and mean so much more. Wonderful read!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-04-29 08:26 PM

Yo James,

There is a good thought behind this nice poem. You'd be surprised how many (most) people have lost someone.

Bobby

Alwye

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Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

4 posted 2009-04-29 08:29 PM

Sometimes you don't have to say anything for someone to understand that you understand.

Nicely written. I especially liked the rhythm and flow of your words.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2009-04-29 08:47 PM

James - written straight from the heart. Lovely...

BC

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

6 posted 2009-04-29 10:23 PM

Nice write James, you tried to help.

Your thoughts were in the right place.

Lindsay

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2009-04-30 11:44 AM

Thank you Michael for the beautiful confession...The poem is vivid and tenderly shareful...A lovely piece of poetry.

yann

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

8 posted 2009-04-30 02:59 PM

Yup. That's the best thing to do. And I like your poem.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

9 posted 2009-04-30 05:01 PM

simple, very real, and fine 'slice of life' write!

applause !!

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2009-04-30 07:13 PM

nice read

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2009-05-01 10:36 AM

What a beautiful heart-write! *S*

2dalimit
Member Elite

since 2000-02-08

Posts 2228
Mississippi coast

12 posted 2009-05-01 04:50 PM

This is a great poetic piece to say you're there, when needed.
Good write.
Melton

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