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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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The tattoo dances as your hips circumvent and circulate my surrounding areas. Our air is thick with heat and sweat. Forty-five minutes of something wonderful. Tell me, how good it feels to meet someone real. Tell me, it can never be anything more than this. Damn. __________________________________________________ -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Paul, Nice work. I haven't seen you in a while. Say hello to Sara for me. Bobby |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
 Tell me. I like the warmth of this one, and the way you use the tatoo to build it.Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Rob-bob... Thanks dude. I don't really know how to write anymore. I will start again, and let it unfold. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Howdy Pilgrim. (name that movie.) Thanks very much. Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
That was quite obviously some great quality time ... lovely! Love, Margherita |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Quality until the "I hope this doesn't interfere with our friendship." talk. This is coming off warmer than I wrote it. Ha... That's alright. It's a half full or half empty poem. It all depends on how you view the words. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
viking_metal - found this writing to be sensual, very nice I must say... BC |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Oh, I liked this. You can't beat forty-five minutes of something wonderful. And as to viking metal, who do you think's better, Amon Amarth or Tyr? I know they're both different styles, but on the debate rages... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Viking! You're back! ~ As well as the continuation of the Sara series?!  Can feel the smouldering passion!!!  EA |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
BC- Thank you much sir. Sun- Amon Amarth. I don't like viking metal that much anyhow. It's more heritage and iron than anything else.  EA- Well ma'am, not quite. It was the Sadie series. Sara is a new interest that seems to have already panned out negatively. Thank you very much. Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
just hold the pen that's all you need to do missed you ,Boshii2 |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks Boshii. Me and the pen grew apart. It was an awkward reintroduction. -P Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
hot... hot... smoldering hot! ; ) ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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brneyedgrly Senior Member
since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125nowhere and everywhere |
this is the second poem i've read of yours that boasts about forty-five minutes of some kind of love...heehee...i am jealous ~I am the keeper of what he cast off~ |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Well ma'am, 45 minutes is a rushed no-nonsense situation. Those are awful good situations at times, though... Everyone deserves to be loved, even you. |
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