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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

0 posted 2009-04-20 10:20 PM

Why does love leave
and where does it go?
I've a heart like stone
with nothing to show,
cold and hard
where nothing can grow.

I suppose maybe it's true...
only once in a life love comes to you
and if it leaves, it's just gone,
going someplace it can't linger on.

I remember love and yes, it was nice
but as they say, lightning doesn't strike twice.

So I go on living, with things like they are,
knowing that someplace is a world too far.

critical mass
Member

since 2009-03-25

Posts 275
Michigan

1 posted 2009-04-20 10:30 PM

I feel really bad for you.
Seems like your posts are getting darker all the time. Here's wishing you the best.

CM

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2009-04-20 10:39 PM

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2009-04-20 10:43 PM

Hugs...I believe that love is circular and is still living in your heart...it needs some nourishment...James

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

4 posted 2009-04-21 02:44 AM

I loved this Dixie, thoughts from the heart shared, pure and truthful, it might not be as bad as it sounds, but isn't it good to get it down on paper and feel the relief of sharing with others. We all wish for our perfect love, not many of us get it you know, maybe 5% I think, could be less, most of us just live the day and the habit which continues into tomorrows. Don't let your heart stay too blue my friend, we just need to walk in the right direction, here this way lol. Take care ok.

Rick

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2009-04-21 02:51 PM

...the ending couplet to this is like an exclamation mark, drawing the reader's attention to the write's resolution...loving the form...hurting for your pain...

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2009-04-21 06:14 PM

Yo Passing shadows,

That's a very clever picture of a rainy day.

I like that.

Bobby

unboundpoetess
Member

since 2008-05-24

Posts 477

7 posted 2009-04-21 06:30 PM

http://www.weatherimagery.com/blog/lightning-strike-twice/
Check that out, Dixie.

Striking last lines.
Heather

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

8 posted 2009-04-21 09:33 PM

That old saying; two out of three aint bad.
interpreted: The first two weren't bad, they were horable, now the third?
Oh yeh.

Don't ever give up looking for the right one.

Keep up the chin,
Tracey

Boshii2
Member

since 2009-02-01

Posts 146

9 posted 2009-04-21 10:01 PM

what a fabulous poem
I always hate your topics and disagree most vehemetly with you philosophies of life but you sure can write.Kind regards Boshii2

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

10 posted 2009-04-22 10:24 AM

You chose the perfect picture for your words! *S*

I know it's probably no consolation... but you're not alone in seeking that someplace. *S*

{{{{{HUGS}}}}}

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