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coppering of widow's lips
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coppering of widow's lips |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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we were the wire men just coppering then in our jaunty clattering jeans with the chimney wide mouths yawning over bone dry leather and laces on the early tide of days we climbed down into the valley of quiet trees carrying the long arms of the dead men in their new jewelry for one way journeys we were vulgar with our eyes and mouths as we smote the stones into pastry gravel and intruded into the virgin earth with hands that were cursed to be heathen lines we made in the sky glowed as gold but were useless without the songs of the wind when it strummed transpositions a vixen harp that dared the snow to kiss lest there grew blisters on the widow's lips __________________ daark translation: old time wire linemen would place copper wire for communications lines...dead men were unsupported cross arms that hung in the middle of canyons to keep the wire from slapping together when the wind blew..transpositions were turnovers in the circuit to cut down noise..the ringing current would raise blisters on the skin if you got across the lines..etc etc etc.. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
glad for the note...I would never have been able to guess.  very cool write D |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
lines we made in the sky glowed as gold but were useless without the songs of the wind when it strummed transpositions You take the mundane and dangerous... and make it exciting and beautiful! This is superb!! One of my cousins was a line man until he was tossed to the ground by a live wire... he survived both the current and the fall, but changed professions. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your explanation added to my understanding ~ and appreciation ~ of this poem. I would like to echo Suthern's reply ~ "You take the mundane and dangerous... and make it exciting and beautiful! This is superb!!"   EA |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
Fascinating write. Thanks for the translation, by the way. How do you do it? |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Interesting write you got here. Clever and awesome as always, BigDaddyDaark. Now I am curious to learn more about the linemen. ~Heather |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Dark I'm an electrical contractor and I only got small hints. I too am glad for the note. The blistering is amazing, I never would have thought. Nice piece of history and as always nicely written. Eric |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suesea, thanks babe ____________________ ms suthern, thanks amiga lady for the read and smile..I did it many years ago and loved the climbing and the place between earth and sky _____________________ ms ea..thank you for looking in this piece _______________________ ms angellea, thanks ms...how do I do it? just the prozac and good whiskey.. ______________________ unboundpoetess..thanks ms, well maybe there are a few more tales around in my memory trunk about them.... __________________ eric..thanks guy...something about the 90 volts DC if the skin is wet or the wire is wet and the skin is dry...dunno the science of why, just know it hurts like a mother in law's kiss |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm pondering the idea that you may well be on the list of most underestimated pipoets... You consistently write intelligent cohesive verse, and so subtle at that. I hope you know that you have my respect. You might prefer m'panties, but you get my respect. *chuckle* I am a serious fan, lovie.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene...thanks so much babe...panties? um...babe, I wear boxer briefs..I do thank you for the offer though...but they would just not fit me right.. I adore your respect and value it highly |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I totally agree with Serenity. Your poetry is interesting, fun to read, and puzzling to understand at times. I love how you use words - and I love maybe misunderstanding the meanings at times. A |
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moonbeam
since 2005-12-24
Posts 2356 |
Great title, and some really wonderful stuff going on in this. Must rank as one of the best pieces I've seen here in Open in many a long year. The sounds, the tone, some really startling images, eg, "pastry gravel". Now I have to shut up, as your crit flag is set to "no"  . |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, thanks babe _____________ moonbeam, thank you very much |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
very nice imagery as always. Cheers. |
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