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Planning My Sons Rescue
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Planning My Sons Rescue |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Two tours were spent on satellite minutes listening to CNN and planning a rescue. "Yesterday, men were cut and slung in pieces from an overpass. We didn't stop." His words squirm like maggots fleshing bone. Nothing I say mends him. On Bill O'Reilly they shoe-flog Saddam and I map escape routes in cold eggs. Two tours were spent on stamps and razors, glued to Fox News and planning a rescue. "Last night I dreamed I flew over Baghdad in the arms of an Angel." The words strained in my ear, his faith on a tether. Nothing I say saves him. On Anderson Cooper they protest funerals and I map escape routes in cold soup. Two tours were spent on condolences and flowers, On BBC they roll coffins from planes. "We tried but couldn't get him out, I watched him burn!" His words erupt in a voice too guilty for acquittal. Nothing I say redeems him. Jim Lehrer scrolls the names of wrecked Marines and I map escape routes in cold coffee. I turn off the volume of war, make hot chocolate and sip through Iraqi postcards. "The kids here are amazing Dad, this is why we're here." And there in a photo of a Marine with three smiling boys, I see escape routes in their eyes. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow this hits me hard and yes, I have planned my escape route through cold eggs a time or two myself  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This packed a punch, and rightfully so. I am sure there are has been many a poem written in a similar train of thought. I hope they all get the heck out of there! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This hit me hard. It is one of the most powerful poems that I have read on this site. It is a keeper - so may I? May I keep this one? You blew me away enough that I need to go and just be quiet. Alison |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent! Very powerful read. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I have shared this with a friend of mine. His son is also in Iraq. My friend said, "wow." And, I thank you on his behalf and on the behalf of all parents who have children in Iraq, Afganistan and other places far from home. A |
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impact Junior Member
since 2009-03-07
Posts 27 |
This was wonderful I loved the beats |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
This is almost disturbing, very deep and well thought out. Well done. Tracey. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I thought about your poem last night, re-read it, then dug out the poetry book I had bought in support of NPR. I thought you may enjoy listening to this author. I wish this poetry did not have to be written. I am just so grateful for them, and may God speed them all home soon. NPR - Brian Turner - Poet Carpe' Diem |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Words fail me, friend. Stunning work that cut to the bone. I won't ever forget this piece. Heather |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Powerful, punch-out-my-breath write!!! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Wows and tears and hopes and prayers! Owl |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
passing shadows Mysteria Alison Eloise Alison impact WTBAKELAR unboundpoetess suthern OwlSA Thanks for the replies. This one means a lot to me and I am glad it was well received. (smiling) |
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angellea Member
since 2009-03-29
Posts 144NC, USA |
So gripping...Soldiers truly are the most unselfish people in the world. God Bless. |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
angellea Yes they are, my son was one of them. We are very proud of him. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this just tears my heart to pieces... two of mine are now in the Air Force, one for just over a year, one leaving me next Monday night. I couldn't be more proud... |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
SEA Thanks for the reply. Hope your sons stay safe. |
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Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
so good Kind regards Boshii2 |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Tears were welling in my eyes as I was reading this solar-plexus grabbing write ~ but when I got to this line ~ ""The kids here are amazing Dad, this is why we're here." ~ the tears slid freely down my cheeks and I got a big lump in my throat. God bless your son, you ~ and all those in harm's way, Love, Light, and world peace, EA |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
This is so touching and painful. Our children are our everything. |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Boshii2 Earth Angel TinaTrivett Thank you all for reading and responding. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Your son has inherited your caring, giving spirit. You have every reason to be proud of him and vise-versa. This piece evoked the most tender and strongest emotions. It's a keeper, for sure. Thank you for sharing your inner most feelings with us. God bless, Rae |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Powerful intense read. Thanks for the emotional share. Eric |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am back to read again. A |
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critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
sandgrain ethome Alison Thank you, very much appreciated. |
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