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Self Destruction |
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cactus Junior Member
since 2006-09-17
Posts 12 |
------------SPACE I float around in, outer space. And I know that, I should stay But I feel the void, the loneliness that comes Why so cold, when close to the sun? Once a slave to your, gravitation I know firsthand of, temptation But from this space, I can only see Through a desperate lens….comfort, warmth, and peace. Falling. Falling to you. Cut the sun wings and I dive Through the heat of, a sinful sky The same pollution, from which I came I fall fast, and I burst into flames Falling. Falling to you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Cut the sun wings and I dive Sometimes the pull is just that strong... for to be without them is to die slowly. Well done... welcome to Passions! *S* |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
This is massively impressive. -P Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Cut the sun wings" Very intense imagery! Enjoyed this offering. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed very much!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Very good. I like how you worked the rhyme in this poem. The poem, itself, is original and a pleasure to read. Alison |
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