»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #44
»
Kamikaze child
| Open Poetry #44 |
|
Kamikaze child |
|
|
critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Dead men trapped in ice cubes, stirred and thawed in sterile seas, form a slick of faces as they drift free of the ice. He drinks to float their memory but he can't escape the waves, when Kamikazes dive into a listing whiskey glass. A dead man trapped in whiskey clings loosely to the rim, and a belt becomes his weapon as he shoots his children down. Surviving isn't easy at the bottom of a glass, with dead men in your ice cubes and a Kamikaze child. [This message has been edited by critical mass (03-26-2009 10:35 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2009 critical mass - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a remarkable entrance, CM. Sounds as if you speak from either educated lessons, or lessons of the real world. Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Message! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
||
|
Boshii2 Member
since 2009-02-01
Posts 146 |
yes...remarkable ..Yokudekimashita! love from Boshii2 |
||
|
ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. Striking write. |
||
SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
welcome!  this is intense |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nodding...you're an interesting writer. I'll be watching for you in the future. Enjoyed. |
||
|
unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
Strong work, CM. I'll read you again. Heather |
||
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Bottoms up they say. Welcome to Pips. This is a most unusual write, one to ponder some more. I like the pen name too. |
||
|
Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Critical Mass, My half Japanese Grandson knows all about the brave Kamikazes. Nice write. Bobby |
||
|
eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
awesome. very gripping lines. i was hooked from the first one. |
||
|
Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very interesting write, critical mass, I will be looking for more. Ida |
||
|
critical mass Member
since 2009-03-25
Posts 275Michigan |
Sunshine Boshii2 ThisDiamond SEA serenity blaze unboundpoetes Midnitesun Robert E. Jordan eminor_angel Marchmadness Thanks for your responses. Much appreciated. I am a little slow to respond to others poems as I am trying to get a feel for the board and figure out if I will be a good fit here. thanx |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
