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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2009-03-17 07:45 AM



I know it seems the same sometimes
when we look into each other's eyes
and wonder if it is love or just lust
or just the same kind of lonely
we swore we would never get on our wanting

I always thought it would matter more
knowing if it was love and if so why
but then there were the rains that came
and the soft places in your eyes
when you didn't have words to use

so you just used my shoulder and arms
and let me know that fragile woman
on some monday's afternoons at coffee
when bedroom doors had car handles
and we didn't sleep to touch together

when just talking for moments was enough
like a rain drop loving the sahara
during some equivalent august
and we were both contented deserts hoping
the winds would move us through each other

and the time of our why would be seamed less


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daark (viscosity)


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Raindance
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1 posted 2009-03-17 08:42 AM


...so deeply, deeply tender, and allowing
of the winds that move through us...

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2009-03-17 09:22 AM


RainDance..thanks so much
Margherita
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3 posted 2009-03-17 09:34 AM


quote:
I know it seems the same sometimes
when we look into each other's eyes
and wonder if it is love or just lust
or just the same kind of lonely
we swore we would never get on our wanting

I always thought it would matter more
knowing if it was love and if so why
but then there were the rains that came
and the soft places in your eyes
when you didn't have words to use

so you just used my shoulder and arms
and let me know that fragile woman
on some monday's afternoons at coffee
when bedroom doors had car handles
and we didn't sleep to touch together

when just talking for moments was enough
like a rain drop loving the sahara
during some equivalent august
and we were both contented deserts hoping
the winds would move us through each other

and the time of our why would be seamed less



Brilliant and moving, dear D.!

Love,
Margherita

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4 posted 2009-03-17 09:36 AM


mister you do soft hearted so beautifully
I loved everything about this

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Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2009-03-17 10:16 AM


ms mar...thanks lady friend


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ms suesea, thanks babe!!

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6 posted 2009-03-17 11:40 AM


when just talking for moments was enough
like a rain drop loving the sahara
during some equivalent august
and we were both contented deserts hoping
the winds would move us through each other

You've written so many lines that captivated... these might just be my favorite. *S* Magnificent!!

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2009-03-17 12:15 PM


ms suthern....thanks lady friend
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8 posted 2009-03-17 04:46 PM


Dark. this reached me in new ways.
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9 posted 2009-03-17 07:46 PM


Beautifully Penned Dark Stranger!

HAPPY ST.PATRICKS DAY



ARCTIC WIND

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2009-03-18 07:57 AM


ms spuddette..thanks my friend..it is so nice to see you back again.

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AW..thanks amigo

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11 posted 2009-03-22 08:57 PM


Daark

This makes me ache a bit inside because it is so beautiful.  Those moments of conversation are sometimes lovlier than lovely when shared among friends who love.  Beautiful, my friend, you touch my inside woman.

A

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2009-03-23 06:07 AM


ms ali-san..thanks babe
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13 posted 2009-03-28 01:20 AM


There are not words to tell you how absolutely beautiful this is!
Dark Stranger
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14 posted 2009-03-28 05:58 AM


pretty1, am glad you felt some of it on your shoulder, thanks
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15 posted 2009-03-29 10:27 PM


seamless seems so unbroken, a perfect fit!

Just like your poem, perfectly put together.
Love the slant, the angles,  the way the light reflects in the afternoon sun.

It's all good, DS~

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16 posted 2009-03-30 06:35 AM


ms bluezy...it is always a treat to
see you looking this way

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