Open Poetry #44 |
Hair Of The Leprechaun (St Patrick's Day) |
turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hair Of The Leprechaun (Pantoum) Just once a year I drink green beer With fuzzy little Leprechauns, Spout risque limericks in their ear, Pick four-leaf luck from neighbors lawns. With fuzzy little Leprechauns We sing that sad song "Danny-Boy", Pick four-leaf luck from neighbors lawns. Who scowl disgust with our annoy. We sing that sad song "Danny-Boy" To people passing on the street Who scowl disgust with our annoy, In nasty words I shant repeat. To people passing on the street, We hoist our beers and drink a toast. In nasty words I shant repeat. The last drunk standing makes his boast. We hoist our beers and drink a toast, Spout risque limericks in their ear. The last drunk standing makes his boast, "Just once a year I drink green beer". turtle Note: Every time I post this poem someone asks me why the Leprechauns are fuzzy...... If you drink too much green beer, everything is fuzzy. (chuckle) |
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Quiet Waters Junior Member
since 2009-03-13
Posts 15IN, USA |
I'm curious Turtle, is this a modified sonnet? Or a combination of meter, repitition and rhyme more likened to a ballad? Or perhaps it is something completely different? I noticed your use of repitition building on each preceeding stanza with the last stanza picking up L1 and L3 of S1 to bring a sense of closure. It's a very nice piece and I just wanted to know how it came to be. Thanks ~ |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hi Quiet Waters, This is a Pantoum. http://www.baymoon.com/~ariadne/form/pantoum.htm |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A good pantoum is very difficult..you made it look easy. You must be an Irish turtle, for sure! |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Thanks Balladeer, That is a nice complement coming from a master I call these and the Ballade "aspirin" poems. (chuckle) |
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