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Jazna Leaning There
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Jazna Leaning There |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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This is about a beautiful girl that died very young from that disease that seems to be from outer space (C) She was my friend and high school lover and we would go boating.....This is from that... The rain on the cabin windows drifts like rinse waves in a car wash. My fingers searching minor sevenths, my ardent gaze the portside rail, to see Jazna leaning there. The summer's marbled skies spread wide our trolling laughter buffed with spray, her listing form against the rail. I tune to open G where all blues and heartaches follow when. From sacred space her spirit falls, a surreal vision cosmos sent. Devolved from humid heavy mist her blue-eyed radiance beams in quandom pose leaning there. With sudden suck of breath to heart, my ebbing guitar descants play to searing pains of her demise. I cry out with odes and tears to see Jazna leaning there. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ I remember the gentle story of Jazna~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, It's always sad to die young from any cause. Bobby |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Marge. It's a part of life never to be forgotten...I appreciate the read and the visit. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It sure is Bobby and there's no getting over it completely if it's a loved one you're close to......Time wioll heal a little as we all know but never completely. Eric |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
ethome |
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada
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Thank you for the great big thank you.... nourzihane | ||||
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Ethome for talking and sharing about Jazna. vivid memories make live. yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts of Janza. Sometimes the saddest memories become the most beautiful poems. Ida |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is so good in so many ways...you can tell as the reader that you spoke from your heart...so many favorite parts that I chose not to quote any...they are ALL good...thank you for sharing... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - I know the loss well, a beautiful young girl in an auto accident, broke my heart it did. Wish you well my friend... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A piece of Jazna spirit lives on within your heart, your memories, ~ and in your gentle, loving poetry. Linda |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you yann, Ida and Steavan I really appreciate the visit and the comforting replies......Drop in anytime. Eric |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Very nicely crafted, Eric. Being a musician myself, I can appreciate the guitar references  One question: in the last line of the third stanza, did you mean "quondam?" (I couldn't fine "quandom" in my dictionary...) Have a wonderful day! Mark |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I still remember like it was yesterday, my first girlfriend in Junior High school, sweet memories of her still remain in a corner of my heart, and always will. This is so sad, and so sweet at the same time Eric, and so brilliantly and lovingly written. I'm sure Jazna felt the same way about you, and probably still does. Blessings my friend, Richy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the read and the kind words Bill & Linda I always appreciate a visit from you both. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marc Thanks for the nice reply and encouraging words. Didn't know you were a muscian, that's good to know. Yes I meant 'am instead of 'om'. I appreciate the visit. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Richy Thanks for the complimentary warm and relating comment. Yes, she was a sweet person and I often wonder how much my life would be different now if she had lived. Some memories are forever and I mean that literally. Take Care Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
We all have to live with the paths we choose... but sometimes choice is taken away from us. She lives on in your mind and your music, my friend... and all of us bask in the beauty. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Suthern I appreciate the visit. Eric |
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unboundpoetess Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 477 |
I know how those tears taste. It's been 15 years and I haven't written about it yet. Sharply felt. H |
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Newpoet Member
since 2008-05-16
Posts 72 |
Beautiful imagery in this narrative. It brings back feelings of beaming nostalgia. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you H & Newpoet Good to meet you and I appreciate the read and the comments. Eric |
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