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The Waters' Words ( Workshop Assignment )
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The Waters' Words ( Workshop Assignment ) |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
'Neath cloudless skies in weather fair I chanced to walk along a stream My footsteps mute on moss clad stones my senses more acute did seem alert to all of natures sounds and of my place within her scheme My thoughts absorbed in lush surrounds as shafts of sunlight rise in columns Attuned to subtle breezes passing cathedral pines in glades grown solemn Down peaceful stream through forest flowing a leaf performs a water slalom Where one might just regain some part of what's succumbed to lifes' demands Renew ones sense of wonder as time moves as if we've stilled its hands The music of the water speaks in tones that one might understand Rush not into that future looming as lambs led to an early slaughter The journey not the destination's that which holds value sons and daughters find those things which for you hold value immerse yourself within lifes waters 'Neath cloudless skies in weather fair I chanced to walk along a stream which spoke to me of passing time in ways I understood it seemed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your words were as calming as babbling stream waters. I bet Balladeer would deem this worthy of a buck or two! lol A very beautiful 'peace' of poetry.   Linda |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hey Doc, Quote: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ The journey not the destination's that which holds value sons and daughters ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Loved this and I certainly agree. Turtle  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
EA, Thank you. From Elysian fields, to turtles' Harbor by way of Bewilderment. Doc turtle, Thanks for the r&r, glad you liked. Doc |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
DrMoose, Can you fix my meter? I can trade you - thinks - wordiness for some meter. I know you are a real smart Moose. In fact, you are the first moose I have met who is a doctor. Are you a medical doctor or a Doctor of Moosology? 'Cause, Doctor, I need rhythmic fixin'. Oh, and by the way, I think this poem is absolutely wonderful. Thanks for sharing it with us. A |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 Tell you what I would LOVE to see, and that is you and Michael doing a duet together, about something that appeals to you both to write together. I bet that would really be one lesson in perfect rhyme we would all want to keep!This was wonderful Dr. Moose. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, Thanks. Reminds me of the old saying, "if it ain't broke, don't fix it". I've seen examples of your meter, and it seems just fine to me, lol, but if you want help with anything specific just let me know and I'll help in any way I can. As far as being a doctor, I'm afraid I forged my poetic license just to get my hands on all the good meds. Doc Mysteria, Thank you. I for one am quite honored that you would even suggest such a thing. While Balladeer and I go back almost as long as Passions has been around, I wouild quite honestly say he is by far much more knowlegeable about poetry than I. That being said, I'm game if he is. Doc |
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