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WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12

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0 posted 2009-03-02 11:42 AM

Today God must Die

I should not have come here.
Why not? You were created to suffer.
Because I am a woman?
Because you care.
About you?
More, much more—about them.
As do you.
Perhaps, but in a very different way.

Do only fools fall in love?
Yes, wise fools. The truly foolish do not fall,
they only experience the attraction of love.
Are we wise, you and I?
Soon you will get your answer: they come.
You will die. Must I watch and remain?
         What will I do with my pain?
What you’ve always done: bear it
until you learn a better way, until you transform yourself.
Into what?
Compassion. You will learn to detach yourself.
         You will learn the deepest form of sorrow.
         You will engender, gestate and birth joy.

Tell me again where you go after your trial?
I go to the ‘not yet place’ I spoke of.
Will I know you again in a new time?

He takes her proffered hand and holds it gently for a moment
                                    (their last moment)
and she receives her answer: all that remains for her, of her,
         to bear her pain,
and his,
and yes, the others’ also.
(for they know not what they do and it begins by forgiving)

Today, God must die and she
         who loves Him beyond herself, can only witness.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2009-03-02 01:05 PM

Very poignant, WW, an emotive, thought provoking write.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2009-03-02 02:16 PM

Some good lines in this
Are we in the garden of Eden or something?

In her mind is that all of this?

Well, it made me wonder so there's something to consider here.

Keep your oxygen mask on and everything will be OK

Eric

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2009-03-02 02:18 PM

Yo WindWalker,

This is well written.

However, my God never dies. He doesn't do that kind of work.

Love Bobby

tao power
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since 2009-02-24

Posts 109

4 posted 2009-03-03 02:24 PM

hmmm

This poem has many similarities to my poem entitled "conversation with st. peter", featured here on this very forum. Perhaps the poems are too similar. it seems you just tried to bite what i've already written.

[This message has been edited by Ron (03-03-2009 04:32 PM).]

Midnitesun

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Gaia

5 posted 2009-03-03 02:42 PM

tao power?

Many writers have used this poetic format, try going WAY back before any of us were alive. I've used this format myself more than once in the past.
WW has no need to copy your words or style, he stands quite well on his own.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2009-03-03 03:45 PM

but this poem? has no issues

its great!

[This message has been edited by Ron (03-03-2009 04:32 PM).]

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

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7 posted 2009-03-03 05:11 PM

Interesting. Tao power thinks the poem is similar to his...and his poem contains comments that it is similar to others. Personally I see little comparison. Many poets use similar events, emotion or topics to write about and there's nothing wrong with it.

tao power
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since 2009-02-24

Posts 109

8 posted 2009-03-03 05:14 PM

i have my doubts. sure, the style is old, but the poems are eerily similar. only the author knows for sure, and i'm certain they'll deny it. in the end who cares anyway. i do not defend my own material.

[This message has been edited by Ron (03-03-2009 05:58 PM).]

tao power
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since 2009-02-24

Posts 109

9 posted 2009-03-03 05:20 PM

the question/answer aspect that reads like a dialogue between a soul and a sagely supernatural being who instructs them on what life will hold? The parallel is undeniable, and maybe it is just a coincidence. I admit this poem is better than mine. It's just...i don't know...too alike for comfort, imo.

turtle
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since 2009-01-23

Posts 548
Harbor

10 posted 2009-03-03 05:42 PM

Hi windwalker,

This is an interesting poem. I have seen many poems on this theme. This is probably a major question everyone asks themselfs at one point or another in life.

"Do only fools fall in love?"

I'm not the right person to answer that question....

TP, Don't get too worked up. I often see poems that I swear are copies of my work.

The similarity only goes to prove that this is an important question for everyone.

Turtle

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

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a 'Universalist' !

11 posted 2009-03-03 08:14 PM

"WindWalker' is one of the folks absolutely least likely to have even the slightest reason to 'imitate' another person's poem (or 'style'); etc.

tao power
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since 2009-02-24

Posts 109

12 posted 2009-03-04 01:06 AM

i await word from the author.

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