Open Poetry #44 |
Compound Fracture |
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
“I wear it for you,” she whispered to no one, and no where, all the while gently rubbing the black and blue. Of all the years and people in between some things never change; just leave different marks. “I bear it for you,” she fingered in the air, to an audience of none, as she rubbed her chest where hope use to beat. That one hurt her body, But this one, this one, broke her heart. Taking with it, the sanity she use to think was too strong to fall apart. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
so hard to reply to Susan... M |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Susan, My crude upbringing taught me never to strike a woman. That's the way all men should be taught. It's just not the thing to do. It's a shame that the hospitals are full of such cases. Anyway, stay away from creeps like that. Love Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (02-25-2009 10:30 PM).] |
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Blood.Wolf Member
since 2009-02-09
Posts 54GA, USA |
I really have nothing to say about this one except for this: "Sadly, things like this happen far too much" Not much else to say about it. “For the strength of the Pack is the Wolf, and the strength of the Wolf is the Pack." |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Impressive writing! |
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Raindance Member
since 2009-02-07
Posts 120West Coast |
Susan, you have worded this so well, in a way that pierces the heart. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
EXCELLENT/('important') powerfully emotive write! As I have stated in the past, I GRANDLY applaud such talented authors who can do 'reality' [social impact/conscience] 'pennings' so effectively! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it's been a long time now for me, but the memories always hurt fresh,. still dont understand why, and I never will. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's been a long time for me too so glad to have found a man who will never hit me this poem really hits home Susan...sad topic but I'm glad you wrote it so well |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Susan, this one hurts and brings back so many memories of my own. I can feel the pain in here. So good to read you again. By the way, I love the photo! Hugs, Ethel Ethels Love Poetry My SpiritIsUp Poetry Shelf Powered by CGISpy.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is brilliant, lovie. *fk* |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
That is such a sad touching poem Susan but you penned it well. Dont lose hope my dear, good times are just around the corner. A big hug to you dear Susan. Lindsay |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow this is a hard one to reply to. Subject matter touchy but important to talk about. Thanks for sharing. Eric |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sad topic, good writing. ida |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yanno, I am always amazed at the number of wonderful replies I get...especially since I am so remiss in replying to others.. Thank you so much for caring and sharing and taking the time for me. for Karen: *fk* (I miss you) for everyone else: "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Oh My, BRAVO Little lady, this certainly packed one heck of a whallop... outstanding write... Lee J. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I swear... this one took my breath away. Brilliant depiction of an impossible situation! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - I read this poem with sadness and also anger. No one should be treated like you write this. Wish you well... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"in the air, to an audience of none, as she rubbed her chest where hope use to beat. That one hurt her body, But this one, this one, broke her heart." ~ And Susan, your sensitive rendering of this far too common scenario, was exceptionally well done. Linda |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: I wish there weren't so many of us that bought and wear this T-shirt. Well done lady C. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
This one is so emotionally powerful to me. I don't know why, but it just packs a punch. I'm glad I found this. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Of all the years and people in between some things never change; just leave different marks." this line stopped me cold...a very powerful write...saddest most of all when you know you've seen this image before and will unfortunately see it yet again...strong image here...well written |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you, everyone. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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