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Junior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 15

0 posted 1999-06-20 07:13 PM

What would it take to make me happy?
I wonder as I lay down and cry.
Since becoming a teenager I've never been happy.
Not really, and I just wonder why.
I've been in love, I've moved away.
I've been back home, but not to stay.
Why can't I feel as I did as a child?
So happy, so care-free, so wild.
It just gets worse, day by day.
So I daydream, and in those dreams I wish to stay.
I wonder what It will take to get me back
to being happy, with my life on track.
I've never know this emotional pain.
I just want to hide, and let the sky drown me with its rain.
This isn't the first time I've felt this way.
And it won't be the last,
Depression's here to stay.
Mom mom doesn't like my attitude,
She says I just don't care, that I'm so rude.
I wish it wasn't like this,
All I've ever wanted to be
Is the daughter that she's wanted,
The one I used to be.

© Copyright 1999 DoeEyes - All Rights Reserved
Dusk Treader
Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187
St. Paul, MN
1 posted 1999-06-20 11:24 PM

Another great work! I enjoy your poems, they show a lot of feelings that I've felt, (albiet from the male side) and can relate with. Hope to see more!

*Dusk Treader* pacing the path between dark and light.

Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
2 posted 1999-06-21 01:15 AM

Wow, I must say, you captured the feeling quite well. I have felt the same, many times in my turbulent teenage life. Great job! I really felt it.

*Krista Knutson*

Junior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 17
3 posted 1999-06-21 03:55 PM

Whoa! Your poem is soo real and true. I'm sure lots of teenagers can relate. Good job on the poem. You're very talented!

*OoOoAudrey AuoOoO*
"Music is my life,without it, I would not be alive."

Junior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 15
4 posted 1999-06-21 06:40 PM

Thank you, thank you, thank you for your replies. I've never before shared my poems with anyone, I think it's SO cool that you guys like them. =)
Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 48
Mays Landing NJ
5 posted 1999-06-22 12:34 PM

I liked this one cause it's true. I have also expierenced feelings that way. The best medicine to cure that pain is true friends!
Keep smiling.


Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
6 posted 1999-08-17 01:28 AM

been there DoeEyes, my teen years were pure hell, you may not think so at the moment (as i didn't either) but things will get better
Former DeadPoet
Junior Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 16

7 posted 1999-08-17 06:29 PM

Great work! Nicely formatted and very well put. Best I've seen here yet. Keep it up.

Have a nice day and smile! =)

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