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Aprender Junior Member
since 1999-06-22
Posts 40Rohill, NJ, USA |
First off...what the hellis up with this board? People post about a million poems, and never respond!!!!! C'mon now folks..we all like reading responses to or own poetry..so give some1 else that feeling....ok here's my latest... "Abandoned" I feel like I'm lost in space Come to school, I'm out of place Like I'm caught between two levels To be good, or with the rebels Am I still your friend? Or did I already reach the end? It's getting hard to tell I'm back up, but once again I fell Things are startin to get blurry I feel like I'm on trial, and my friends are the jury Am I innocent or guitly You look at me like I'm filthy Are you with me? Or the opponent? I don't know, so I lone it I'm feeling all alone No one's calling on the phone When it private you say we're the bestest of friends But once we're in public, that's where it ends Do you know how much that hurts It feels the worst I'm sittin here, pouring out my feelings You've given so much pain that still needs healing I wish I was cryin When I'm like this, you say I'm just whinin Or you just ignore It was never like this before How come we're not friends anymore? Losing you has always been my fear You still claim you love me, but when there's others around I just seem to disappear Nothings happened, we didn't even fight Then how come things between us don't seem right? Act to me the way you say it is when you write You know how actions speak But for me will you ever seek? Or just pass right by You know you're the only one who can amke me cry So why do you do the things you do? You wouldn't like it if I did it to you I listen to injustices done onto you, but have you ever been on the toher side of the fence? Am I starting to make sense Often it's a cycle of doing wrong and to apologize Why can't we compromise I know ever realtionship has it's lows and highs But it seems more of the latter for us Or am I making too big a fuss? At the end of this will I call you mu hun? I'm in it for the long run It seems even when I work that much harder It doesn't seem to bring us any farther We had so much history But I can read your thoguhts and they say, "Dave, you mean shit to me" |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Wow, that was a really great poem. It told a good story that I can definitely relate to. |
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r.t. New Member
since 1999-07-05
Posts 6Chicago |
that was incredible....i liked it alot....i've been through the same situation before.. |
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David Junior Member
since 1999-07-03
Posts 10 |
Good poem. I can relate with that sort of thing. too often someone will be a friend in private and not in public. A shame to say the least. Also agree that more should repond to poems posted. [This message has been edited by David (edited 07-06-99).] |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wonderful job, I enjoyed it a lot. And thanks for bringing up the responding to poetry point yet again. Come on people, lets help out our fellow poets here! You get what you give.... ------------------ *Krista Knutson* |
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bucky New Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 9falmoth,mass usa |
i did not like your poem |
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Aprender Junior Member
since 1999-06-22
Posts 40Rohill, NJ, USA |
may i ask why you didn't like it? |
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bucky New Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 9falmoth,mass usa |
sorry i actually did not read it till now. are you amy becouse you always say come on now |
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Aprender Junior Member
since 1999-06-22
Posts 40Rohill, NJ, USA |
Amy?? who is that? and when did i say come on now>? |
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