Teen Poetry #1 |
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Cosey Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 14To., Ont, Can. |
Being devoured by flesh hungry monsters These beasts eat me alive I swoon as their tongues flick against my rib cage Their eyes shut tight Lost in themselves I, lucid, my eyes wide open Clinging tight and biting hard at skin Each chance at freedom is overlooked But i still think of running When they have gorged themselves, Satisfied, their fangs dripping red I lie dislocated My arms outstretched Reaching for some semblence of warmth Ignored though I sob at my bruised skin and ego This is a bit overdone i know but if you could comment and tell me if you understand this at all.. |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
to me it kinda sounds like the way that I feel when the "popular" people are surrounding me. When everyone is taking thier turn in hurting me in one way or another. I'm not sure if that is the true meaning you were trying to convey, but I liked it. ------------------ ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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Cosey Junior Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 14To., Ont, Can. |
thank you for yr reply actually its about a bad/confusing (sexual) relationship..but i like yr thoughts on it being about popular people..it fits well |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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