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Tinfang Gelion
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 14

0 posted 1999-09-26 09:44 PM

Written two years ago..

"That Feeling at Splashtown"

On the highest ride the hydra knew,
Was one of its three tentacles, although not eight,
Called Screamicles, I was up there
My friends were down the stairs to my left,…
There were two men and a girl in front
Getting ready for the swoop of summer…
My face was sunburnt like a desert-wanderer,
My hair was golden like the sun's wheat-
On my lips were blue,
From the raspberry slush I had for lunch.
That girl in front of me had me confounded
With the mystery of my dreams.
It could be a boy or girl in my dream,
With the African/Australian mask of expression…
Though, she was much like me,
With the same lightness of skin and eyes,
O', why do I shake at my imagination
When it all goes real like a passing cloud?
She, I knew not, had a happy, modest face.
Why, that's an understanding face!
I'm so ashamed of me, for when she looked
At me, and smiled, I looked at my friends then
At her. She looked at them…
Jarod was a dramatic being like most,
then she sighed & looked away.
Same feeling I have of my friends…
Oh, then one of the men went down the slide
He was funny as a sight going down,
His belly was the last thing seen at once,
She laughed at the same time I did…
She pointed at him to the other man,
and explained…
Like I always have to explain when people
Don't understand why I laugh.
I then looked at the blue skies,
Realized my fading sense of reality…
For the clouds were sensibly unforgettable.
I can tell just by looking at people's eyes,
The feeling their heart might have.
Oh, I am only an illusion of illusions…
I feel things from the reality of imagination!
That's why I love me, who I am.

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1 posted 1999-10-02 12:13 PM

Where are all the teens? Why didn't you guys reply to this one? Anyways, Tinfang, wonderful poem. Made me think of some of my summer memories and a lot more...


"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."

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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
2 posted 2007-11-13 07:46 PM



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