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the supposed dream life...now i wanna die
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the supposed dream life...now i wanna die |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny 
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every girl wants me every guy wants to be me but still i feel so empty inside I always get wat i want i dont need any more but still i feel so empty inside i always find the perfect girl but snhe doesnt fit my standards im all my teachers favorite student but still i feel so empty inside i never gain weight,the more i eat the more i get built but still i feel so empty inside so i cant handle this on perfect world.. i wanna end my life,maybe theres an afterlife it must be ebtter then this ------------------ I wish i were a poet |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Well, I cant tell if this poem is you, or if you are describing someone.......but i liked the point it made |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
unfortionettly this poem ios me |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
Interesting Poem. Reminds me of one I read in high school. It was in a set of poems much like the Spoon River Anthology, but I don't think it was actually part of the SRA. Anyway though, I like the point being made, but then maybe wordings like "perfect girl" are poorly worded, unless of course the intent was to be fecetious, in which case it's very well done. I know the empty feeling, but in your case, it sounds like you could have a lot of support finding something that fills your heart. Maybe your poetry could fill the void. -Matt ------------------ "Lost time is never found again." -Ben Franklin. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
There is an afterlife, MS...and it is the life you achieve after deciding the one you have now is not fulfilling your needs. But the key is "life", not ending it. Email me if you need someone to vent to. I'm old, but I'm here  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
WOW MIKE I NEVA THOUGHT THAT THERE WAS A SENSITIVE SIDE TO YOU!!! |
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Tanya Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 43Brooklyn, NY, USA |
LOL THATS A NICE REPLY OLGA, MIKE SERIOUSLY WHY DO U THINK U R SO PERFECT THAT IS WHAT IS RUINING U, TO YOURSELF. I THINK YOU ARE VERY CONCEITED, DONT TAKE IT PERSONALY. |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
olga,ever since we met u knew i was concieted....y not i had u and every1 else drooling overme... Ok tanya,no shit i sound concieted....but i dont hink im so called perfectin my eyes...im explain im so called "perfect" in every1 elses,in mine im very afr from perfect ------------------ I wish i were a poet |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
LOL WHEN YHE HELL DID U EVA HAVE ME, AND EVERY1 ELSE. UR SO SELF ABSORBED U THINK THAT EVERY1 IS LIKE OBSESED WIT U. TANYA WAS RIGHT THIS IS WUTS RUINING U, OH WAIT THERE'S NOTHING ELES LEFT TO RUIN! P.S. NO SHIT UR NOT PERFECT, AND BTW, THAT LINE ABOUT U NOT GETTING FAT IS PURE BULLSHIT. HAVE U EVA TAKEN A NICE LONG LOOK IN THE MIRROR? U SHOULDNT LIE TO PPL LIKE THAT AND ESPECIALLY TO URSELF!!! P.P.S. OH AND DO TAKE IT PERSONALY. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
OK, I'm a newbie and everything, but I have a friend, almost like you. She has everything, and still her father gives her more. Perhaps you should find someone, not particularly beautiful or clever or popular, but someone with a ear to listen, someone who looks past all the outer things, all the masks, that doesn't judge. If you still feel empty, try charity, giving some of what you have, to others that don't. OK, so that is what I think, then again I might be wrong. |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
Trust me Tears, NOTHING and I mean nothing can help him now. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Olga.... so harsh....Nothing can help him now? There is always something...some people find it in God...others in love.....and some never do find what they need....but its always there ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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