Fall Of Discontentment (Kaoru's Challenge)

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Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

0 posted 2004-09-29 10:34 PM

A challenge by Kaoru:
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Kaoru's word list to be used:

~ Mustard Seeds ~ Lemon Grass ~ Aroma ~ Oracle ~ Pendulum ~ Fate ~ Discontentment ~ Gazing ~ Seizure ~ Muse ~

~* Fall Of Discontentment *~

Seasonal discontentment grows like mold in Paradise,
Waning spirits suffer through such sickening osmosis.
Mere mortals stand who chanced being strewn
Like an emptied box of mustard seeds
To be forever buried in fields of tall lemon grass
Left to slowly die in salt water and tears.

Weary souls reek in an aroma of sweat, fear, but constant faith.
Gazing out from inside the pendulum’s eye,
I wonder if there is satisfaction in the knowing
That no amount of playing with fate, any oracle, or muse
Could ever have stopped her seizure?

My heart goes out to all of you that suffered at the hand of Mother Nature this Fall.
May you soon get your lives back in order.

Photo: Courtesy of ALEX BOERNER, staff photographer, TCPalm.com

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (09-29-2004 11:11 PM).]

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2004-09-29 10:50 PM

Bravo dear Sharon!
A challenge extremely well met!
Hugs~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

2 posted 2004-09-29 11:24 PM

Sharon,
Well lady I am impressed. And then there is the sensitivity value it packs too! I'd say you aced this challenge. Well done.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2004-09-29 11:27 PM

Sharon...Pretty amazing, you are!!! as is this poem!

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2004-09-29 11:45 PM

I will send the same prayer Sharon, in hopes all will be ok with every one affected.....you wrote this with so much heart....hugsss

~~*~~
Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)
~~**~~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

5 posted 2004-09-30 12:13 PM

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2004-09-30 01:14 PM

Still waiting to get through on some phone to friends in Florida, but will have to think that all that is being done, is.

Well, it sure has been a bad September for some in this world that is for sure.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

7 posted 2004-10-01 04:03 AM

I would have to hang a gold ribbon on this in meeting the challenge. Great when someone takes a challenge and doesn't get so lost in the challenge that they forget content. You got the content, the heart, and the challenge all flushed out. Well done.

Robert Joseph
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since 2000-10-07

Posts 491
South Carolina

8 posted 2004-10-01 05:31 AM

Excellent work, your phrasing is heart felt and magnetic.

Robert Joseph

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

9 posted 2004-10-01 12:16 PM

Glad you think I met her challenge as I saw discontentment and knew instantly what the theme was, Mother Nature.

I am still trying to reach PoetdeVine, hope they have power soon down there. Gosh, just thinking about lack of good food supplies, proper water, or things we actually all take for granted, etc. in the land of the "retired" makes me very nervous. Those poor people down there I hope are banding together to help each other out.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

10 posted 2004-10-01 12:29 PM

Perfect and a pleasure to read...thank you!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

11 posted 2004-10-03 02:39 AM

Thank you for reading this. Looks like our Meghan is not around - now that is a very good sign I bet. I can't wait for her baby to be born.

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

12 posted 2004-11-04 05:57 PM

Just getting back into the swing of things and reading this has brought back some memories. Hurricane season ends in a few weeks and we are all very grateful...

This was a challenge well met!! Lovely in the face of the amount of destruction Florida suffered.

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