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Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2000-03-13 09:14 AM

Fain An' I Should See

imprison(ing)
   collective dream
                       dream(s)
                          dream(ed)
                             dream(ing)
mankind's
   sole triumph...
       is that
   o' chancherous failure-s
Nightmared~
                    (tossing-turned)
    bred alive
         as morning (mourning)
   star - Lucifer's Pleasure
           ~sanctified evil~
                    christened holy...wholly;
     drowned under
        tears despair(ing)
                 in callous bed
                     o' selfish desire
Hope~lessness;
Hope~
   turned
       alas
         distraught;
      to a playground verb
where -
   legions seven
   ("deadly" sins)
  drawn admixed;
     amalgamation-
in demons three
     ‘gainst
angels four (fore)
  enraptured all
   in hate;
     dueling,
   o'er malignant morality;
       e'en though...
  submerged
‘neath the tainted tang
    o' quagmire shamed
~still~
an' yet; pursuing
power/pooled
in wanton lust(ing)
Love~
terminology termed;
    catechism thrown...
   tossed aside into
   faithless shadowed streams
turbulent
               and
                    troubled;
    no hint o' "crystal clearing"
where...
faith~
   tear-born trash
        o' guilt implied
                         denied
                              retried an' achieved
deems futures
    ne'er found...
          for that all which is claimed,
   e'er is it shown,
   in tragic scenery-
   ~benevolence~
              acts o' kind(ness)
   are
   faux
     an' far between

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

1 posted 2000-03-13 10:07 AM

Ancient dark here
very biblical old dawn of time

lucifer demons angels very much my thing
an excelent piece

"And the world was thrown
into eternal night
The seas boiled
And the rivers ran with blood

And all was the blackness
of the fallen one
and his children roamed
free of the shackles of light"

Did you write the Book of Love
And do you have faith in God above
If the Bible tells you so
Do you believe in rock 'n roll
Can music save your mortal soul
And can you teach me how to dance real slow

Anthony
Junior Member

since 2000-03-13

Posts 12

2 posted 2000-03-13 11:25 AM

Loved it

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-03-13 04:30 PM

I agree with walter...
liked this...cryptic and dark...
creative stlye and presentation too
take care jm

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch
You never knew what I loved in you
I don't know what you loved in me
Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be
jackson browne

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2000-03-13 05:41 PM

Chris - this has got to be my personal favorite of all your works. I could just be partial to the subject matter but this is written so well... It wreaks of futility and power simultaneously. Love the line:

an' yet; pursuing
power/pooled
in wanton lust(ing)
Love~

but then you knew that would grab me....

Wonderful poem bud...

michael

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

5 posted 2000-03-13 09:05 PM

Very intense...
I find it reminds me of the confusion found in the bible - was that your intent?

[This message has been edited by Seaangel (edited 03-13-2000).]

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

6 posted 2000-03-14 04:41 PM

Walter - Thank you! Exactly the feel I was hoping for!

Anthony - Thank you.

JM - Thank you too, I'm glad you enjoyed... and I always take care!

Mike - Yes, thank you... and thank you for leaving the demons at my house instead of taking them with you! They've been constant companionship since you've left...good and bad.

SeaAngel - Yes and no... yes in that I wanted it to feel "biblical" but no one the confusion part.. that wasn't intentional.. it just sorta happened!

Thanks...

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