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A jot down of thoughts, a bad poem.
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A jot down of thoughts, a bad poem. |
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croyles Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 102 |
Sorry ´Larry C, I didnt have enough time apart from those 10 minutes it took me to write this, I made it a bit funny at least. Actually I think this is the worst poem ive seen in my life so im simply going to classify it as, Prose> Fiction> Letter. To Ginger: Dear Humans. Your language bewilders me, I cannot understand your philosophy, And more than once have I been puzzled By your stupidity when it comes to love: Love is a myth! And all should know it! Of what you humans call giving and taking In mutual respect for all, in reality all it is, Is something you all made up; Forcing it upon yourselves Like the dumb monkeys you are. As soon as your sex drive has been turned to full power, you young and innocent people Get so confused And think it is some Fantastic thing that will get you rich, Redeem you, give you self-esteem, Make you more affectionate, Show light to the point of your life Or maybe even make you more considerate… Ill give you some advice: Do what you think would be dumbing it down, Intelligent, isnt it? That way, your path to bliss will only be half a mile away. Start off slow, do worse in your work and study, Maybe even write a bad poem (Not mentioning any names), Or act like a chicken. That way you wont have all those idle quarrels With your loved ones, and everything Will be much easier. You humans don’t even know your true selves. Yes its true, the only way to attain yourself Is in being able to use the other eighty percent of your brain, And the only way to do that is too keep talking along with logic and all You other stupid things, such as intuition, Emotional intelligence, spiritual and other ones, But that’s a long way away, so why not dumb it down If your happy that way? Goerge and Arnold are already doing it! They’ve caught on and you havnt, How downcasting. Anyway I hope you find the right path. Yours sincerely, Growling Ape with Rotten Teeth. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
It made me think anyway. Read it twice.  |
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croyles Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 102 |
thats good, cause that was my only intention for the poem anyway, to make people think. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
croyles, It is an interesting write. It definitely spawns some fresh thinking. I'm assuming that it is from one of the challenge topics. It's my turn to feel dumb, which one? If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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croyles Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 102 |
It was just meant to be ironic, i dont feel dumb or anything. This was written for "A challenge from a teacher" |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
very intersting.it does make you stop and think, but love does make the world go around. hate kills it. but most do have the wrong definition of love. like respect, just as important as love, that's why most relations dont work, along with greed, not caring for others needs. thanks for sharing your thoughts and opinions |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
croyles -- very thought provoking writing. You address many issues and some of your perspective I agree with but I look at other things you've said here and take it with a sardonic or ironic depth. Love is the stretcher which carries us out into the next realm, I believe, but agree it surely isn't the kind we seek for ourselves. Enjoyed your prose! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Do what you think would be dumbing it down, Intelligent, isnt it? That way, your path to bliss will only be half a mile away. Interesting... I'll come back again to read this with a fresh look. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
enjoyed the read |
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croyles Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 102 |
Well, it is a mixture of real thoughts and jibberish that i purposely put down to fill in some space, lol. Im really glad I got a crowd of 6 people just by writing down my thoughts in 10 minutes, wehay! |
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