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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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While its true that I have never written or ever before had the desire to do so it came to me that there are things that need to be said But, that particular endeavor has been difficult at best So, I prattle on couching my concerns in metaphor alluding allegorically to that which matters Gilding turds, so to speak, in my own fashion Realizing, that if it were enough to just write things those things, may have already been written But, because I am a creature of ego I feel too, that things written are to be read And since I don’t yet enjoy the anonymity of history I am given to thoughts of messages in bottles Entertained by the notion that what I’ve fermented Could be distilled onto paper and bottled in bond To be cast into the ocean with other such flotsam I am amused that what I find to be so weighty Could be easily buoyed by so small a vessel And bob along endlessly upon Neptune’s ceiling [This message has been edited by wranx (03-28-2004 08:50 AM).] |
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EternitysHorizon Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 145Twilight's Orchestra |
I suppose the proverbial message in the bottle is always a surprise- so be it if ye seek posterity thus good luck. "High on the Mountain, where the Sun stil Shines, and the water runs a little lazy." |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I like this; its a weird thing, the desire to write and to be heard - somehow its just not enough to think about it (whatever it may be) |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"Gilding turds, so to speak, in my own fashion" ok, im just going to laugh, because i liked that line so much  you always amaze me, im not anyone important, but i do listen, i do mentally digest the words, and i do try to learn from them (in one way or another).... Yes words exist to be heard, and YOURS will always have an audience |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
If I had the money (which I do not), I would publish you! Ego down, ego down.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Some amazing images there Bro... this is a keeper Maree Beauty of the world which is soon to perish has two edges, one of laughter and one of anguish, cutting the heart asunder. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx My bottle floats upon the same sea. Enjoyed |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Library, with spotlight.  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...understanding this! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
AWESOME WRITE!!!!! ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very cool write Ed...much enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I think there's a market for bottled yeti.  |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
You go right to the core of the writer's motive... the writer's incentive! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
would gildeds compost for my garden?  Ed, I loved this connection to the other write. As for 'Neptune's ceiling'.... brilliant! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic Ed, and this: 'And bob along endlessly upon Neptune’s ceiling' just a fantastic and witty image 'Quantum materiae materietur marmota monax si marmota |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"And since I don’t yet enjoy the anonymity of history I am given to thoughts of messages in bottles Entertained by the notion that what I’ve fermented Could be distilled onto paper and bottled in bond To be cast into the ocean with other such flotsam I am amused that what I find to be so weighty Could be easily buoyed by so small a vessel And bob along endlessly upon Neptune’s ceiling" You've written me also with this one Ed. Very much enjoyed... |
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