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Angels Under Snow |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{So this page is yours for the pleasure of touching} soon dawn will slide from the over hangs of these ice walls Even tonight I paint images of a green mirror -- as if the only strokes-- were of my being alone would gaze my eyes It is one version to show his blues eyes -- the piano player the moon hits full on shoulders that vanish among waves in a veiled mist trace one finger of silver along the edge ofspace winds blow, long after dark for stars already wished upon {sleepless} open palms water rises to meet me I have no thoughts left: only faint echoes of catching butterflies -- endless hands through amber skies your face sketched in blacks and grays wake me in your dreams -- pretend you love me for the sake of fire&water kiss the images of tears, on nights velvet eyelids I flow in emeralds woven tones my heart needs rest all this rain -- remains oceans music: {so this page belongs to you for the pleasure of touch} this is life: empty ~*~ In your light I learn how to love In your beauty how to make poems You dance inside my chest where no one sees you and that sight becomes art [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (01-12-2004 04:41 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) As always your poetry deeply touches my heart whether it makes me smile or cry, and you are the artist who creates these special colors, yay! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"your face sketched in blacks and grays wake me in your dreams -- pretend you love me for the sake of fire&water kiss the images of tears, on nights velvet eyelids I flow in emeralds woven tones my heart needs rest all this rain -- remains oceans music:" I know the tune...  This reminds me of a B/W photo I have on my desk, taken on a rainy day at the gulf. Very cool write as always Lauren. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Excellent Lovely use of multiple images and a poem within a poem. Dave |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"wake me in your dreams -- pretend you love me for the sake of fire&water kiss the images of tears, on nights velvet eyelids" Fantastic write Lauren... Love ya pretty lady. Hugs~ In the midst of winter.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
trace one finger of silver along the edge ofspace winds blow, long after dark for stars already wished upon {sleepless} open palms water rises to meet me I have no thoughts left: may you always have thoughts my friend.. and may you always share them with us. I'm always touched when I read your words, and always left a bit in awe, as well as feeling the mystery... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
"trace one finger of silver along the edge of space winds blow, long after dark for stars already wished upon {sleepless} what an incredible write, Greeneyes, filled with imagery and emotion... I'm saving this one... ~K~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
GreenEyes~ As lovely as ever ... maybe more so~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
The watercolored canvases you create are most interesting to read! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is breathtaking! I have to shake my head in awe! I love it... I hope you are ok though.  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
lauren- as always, outstanding, this piece is so rich in emotion, it touches to the very core...and though it is aching and sad, it is also powerful and shows strength...i am in awe as i am often upon reading you! "only faint echoes of catching butterflies -- endless hands through amber skies" this is beyond any doubt some of the most beautiful imagery i've ever had the pleasure to read. brilliant! love ya girlie, amy "When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter" |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
If I keep reading your poetry I'm going to have to buy a dictionary of superlatives, that's all there is to it! The way you capture images and the dimensions behind them is incredible (he said, after vainly searching for a better word)..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
"Even tonight I paint images of a green mirror -- as if the only strokes-- were of my being alone would gaze my eyes" ~ It was difficult for me to pick one stanza as my favorite, but it is not difficult for me to know this... I would like to know Lauren's thought process as she writes poems, such as this one. Clearly enjoyed... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I dont have to tell you that I love it, cuz you already know it... but I do and I will tell you... I LOVE IT.   |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Touched...indeed. Thank you, Lauren. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is so beautiful and sad...just the way I like them you touch my heart girl |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It is one version to show his blues eyes -- the piano player the moon hits full on shoulders that vanish among waves in a veiled mist trace one finger of silver along the edge ofspace winds blow, long after dark for stars already wished upon {sleepless} open palms water rises to meet me I have no thoughts left: only faint echoes of catching butterflies -- endless hands through amber skies your face sketched in blacks and grays wake me in your dreams -- pretend you love me for the sake of fire&water kiss the images of tears, on nights velvet eyelids I flow in emeralds woven tones my heart needs rest all this rain -- remains oceans music: {so this page belongs to you for the pleasure of touch} this is life: empty ====================== I would find a way to read you blind...touch the words etched in gold leaf braille... for in the end...I am the one who is so gratefully touched. Nature poets can't walk across the backyard without tripping over an epiphany. |
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