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serenities_blood
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand

0 posted 2003-12-21 11:00 PM



My heart an open wound
Lost and broken I’ll find you near
Though pain is resistance
I can’t find a reason to let go

Bleeding and reaching toward the light
This pain is all I can see
But life is just too confusing to fight…

So wipe my eyes

Hold me close
Let me feel your bleeding betrayal
Let me show you what real pain feels like
Let me cry on your pillow

Lying and crying I seek my right
This hunger is taking over
But love is just too confusing to fight…

So wipe my eyes

Taste my mind with filthy curiosity
Rearrange my heart
Close your eyes to shield the light
Of electric hate and blinding regret

Hiding and struggling through the frozen night
This hate is suffocating me
But everything’s just too confusing to fight…

So wipe my eyes.


© Copyright 2003 Gina G. - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-12-21 11:12 PM


I thought this deserved a place of its own as well, so I welcome the addition to Open...

and yes, I still like the part about filthy curiosity the best.

But shaking my head at your choice of name, smile.

That one may be a tad too taint. (but time will tell)

But I'm okay with it, and I welcome you!

Happy holidays.

serenities_blood
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand
2 posted 2003-12-21 11:21 PM


Thank you.

My name may seem taint, but all if you look deeper i am actually saying that even the most serene and tranquil things have its faults. ie. the blood explains that everything has an imperfection. My name is only saying that i am that serene imperfection.

Thanks anyway!

xoxLORxox

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2003-12-21 11:24 PM


I wasn't implying you were taint, sweetie.

ME.

smile.

"serenities_blood"

My apologies for the misunderstanding.


Greeneyes
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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
4 posted 2003-12-21 11:45 PM


Hi, and Welcome to Passions.  We are glad you have joined our circle of friends, and family….

please check your email for a special greeting


Kindly

Greeneyes~

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May the miracle of
Christmas touch your
life with special blessing

H A P P Y  H O L I D A Y S

pictureme
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since 2003-11-28
Posts 248
Ohio, USA
5 posted 2003-12-21 11:52 PM


welcome.....I liked how you began with the line
"My heart an open wound"
The reoccuring lines reminded me too
" So wipe my eyes"
pictureme :-)

Midnitesun
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Gaia
6 posted 2003-12-21 11:52 PM


Welcome to Passions!
Love's emotions aren't always warm and tender. You've expressed the painful side well.


serenities_blood
Member
since 2003-12-21
Posts 56
New Zealand
7 posted 2003-12-21 11:57 PM


Wow thanks people!

I really do like this site and i can stay on for hours just reading the inspiring poems you guys have to offer.
Talent is definatley something you people possess.
Cheers agen

xoxLORxox

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2003-12-22 03:05 PM


Welcome to Passions!

this is very deep...this aches to the core.

i hope you have a happy holiday.
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
9 posted 2003-12-22 04:13 PM



When I first saw your user name, I wondered if we were welcoming more family of serenity's into Passions... ...as it is, you have a talent all your own, and I will enjoy following your progress.

Welcome to Passions!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
10 posted 2003-12-22 08:58 PM


Welcome to Passions.  Well written and full of emotion.  

"When your life is tossed and turning
And you are on the raging sea I'll come and pull you from the water Then you will know that you are free" - MWS

iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
11 posted 2004-01-16 10:35 PM


Phenominal write!  I see this was your first post and I did not welcome you to PIP here -- that I do now!  Glad to read your writing.
Mistletoe Angel
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12 posted 2004-01-17 05:03 PM






(big angel hugs) Oh Laura, looking at your screen-name had me thinking of something very similar to how you described it; of Most Precious Blood of Christ and that you have the spiritual blood in your veins and breathe its essence through every heartbeat, I love your name, this is a fabulous debut! Welcome to Passions, sweet Laura, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your wonderful words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Laura, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"You'll find something that's enough to keep you
But if the bright lights don't receive you
You should turn yourself around and come back home" MB20

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