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Wranx’s Masquerade
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Wranx’s Masquerade |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
I imagined to don a masque, to slip into and through, raiding me a rainbow’s view with twilight eyes that dance in kind to be another soul entwined but at the core of me and we and all the we’s we split into which offers up silver slivered views of thoughts that have yet been shared tells me that I do not dare. No masque for me, of feathery construct only imaginations, now and then plucked ~ so to flower the wall, and beige a dream I shall sit the chandelier, my friends, as you dance till dawn, seek morning, again. For I’ve played this game and several before, only to lose myself through many a door too many of me, a puzzled flair emoting shadows in the air. But waltz the dance, as lovers do for the ball’s begun the lights are low, take up the masque, and please you, just so. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Ohh... hmm... I think I see Serenity... but I could be wrong. Also I've never read from you before so it's hard to judge this poem in relation to your usual style, or know how much credit I should give you. Let me just say that I loved it, especially how the subject matter hinted at who (in my opinion) you were emulating. Nice work... Faith is a fine invention |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This has an incredible flow to it and your use of imagery in this is excellent. Very well done. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
a softer version of Ser perhaps... without the edges.. but I am not convinced it is Ser you emulate... the masqerade is in and of itself a construct of illusion and of hiding... perhaps, we hide less behind the mask than in front.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This CAN'T be me. Cap's right...much more graceful than I could pen. (tho the dancing bit confused me, I confess, that and the meter is prolly right for me, that and the irregular rhyming.) but? I don't me very well either. scratching me head here, Elan. (but oh, if it IS me, thank you--I didn't thing anybody wanted to "do" me. giggle.) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Karenity, unsure that anyone would want to "do" her? I see her here as well Elan, whether or not it was her masque you donned. Anyone would be flattered by this fine poem. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I see a little of Martie |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 SUNSHINE!is it Sunshine? |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You sure can write! ~ and write well! This poem has a marvellously mysterious and surreal tone to it.  EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
beautiful writing , ok lesse hmmm this says K: emoting shadows in the air. but reads like Karilea soft and spiraling well met, I must say I am on the fence with this one *smiling here* xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ahh Geez! Now I see Martie! Are you sure you're not changing masks here? Elan, the shapeshifter...lol |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Elan, I too think it's Karen, but it may also be Martie perhaps! (big hugggssssss) Romance shines in this piece, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok fine,now I am all confused it is K, Martie and Kari there now I cant be wrong *smile* xxoo |
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