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Guilt is a "He" (8 months to get to 1,000 posts)
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Guilt is a "He" (8 months to get to 1,000 posts) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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I see his disdain in the mirror staring back with arrows of accusation Who is he? His eyes implore me what does he want me to see? Backwards fall symbolic stall I learn to crawl Suffocating air reverbrating blare I pretend no care He follows me He sees my mind knows the abstract design I need to shake this never ending ache of my own make Guilt knows no vacation it is my station even as I reach for salvation |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
WOW!!A deep write here and I hear you in this.Congrats on your 100th post  angelblueyes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...[8 months to the 1000th post...] But look how you do it, so very well, indeed! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is hard to release something carried for a long time; it always makes me feel out of balance. I like this poem. Thank you for sharing it. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Angel~Thank you so much for your kind words. Karilea~You are the kindest women I know. I blush at your flattery. Icy~I missed you! Out of balance indeed..I have gotten very good at turning away from the mirror before I see a reflection... Susan |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I need to shake this never ending ache of my own make Aww, but you write the ache so well, and the wavering within. Congrats on your 1000th post Susan~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Bluesy! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A fine little treatise on the patriarchal archetype. Er...well, that's how I saw it anyway. *wink* (No need to page Freud, I just analyze MYSELF.) Congratulations, Susan! I look forward to many more.  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Congratulations on the 1000. Sorry to hear it's sadness that has brought you to this point. However, there is hope I started with an ache I couldn't except by writing and look at me now. I've moved on but I'm still writing. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Ah...well I suppose it is better no to cast a reflection. *grin* |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
congrat's on 1,000 enjoyed your penning,,, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Karen~LOL I do the same! And when is the best time to analyze oneself? At night when you're all alone, when no one can see the weakness of tears.... Kethry~My ache or guilt, as in this piece, is only from time to time, I won't allow it more recognition then that...otherwise I really am at a much happier place...Thank you for reading. Icy~LOL that was what I was going to type at first then changed my mind..ignored reflection or no reflection? It's a toss up according to the day...Thank you for returning. QJQ~Thank you so much! Susan |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Susan... and congrats on the thousand posts.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Ron. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Congrat on your 1000th post! I must say I have been on this trip before (the guilt trip) courtesy of a "he." Now I'd rather lounge around the house than to take that trip again. A great write! Patricia [This message has been edited by Patricia (08-12-2003 08:47 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Wonderful write, Susan. I even enjoyed the title quite a bit. Congrats on your 1,000th, by the by.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Susan, don't feel bad...we all have lives to live... I remember a time that I kicked out a thousand in like three weeks...sad thing some would call it addiction  great write, btw! Congrats! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Nice write, especially like the flow toward the end. Congratulations on the milestone Not sure how long it took me, Milestones look long in coming, quick in passing Gloom |
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