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Judas Speaks:
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Judas Speaks: |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Someone had to smelt the iron some one had to pound the bar founding glowing strength to bits-- Someone had to forge the nail. Someone had to fell the tree. and split the wood accordingly, a carpenter toiled lovingly binding beam to beam in cross. Someone had to give offense-- someone must--release the dove. Someone had to dare the wrath offering an olive branch in the hand that proffered love-- even as the tables turned. Someone had to yield to tempt and live in infamy's contempt-- someone had to place his head in the noose of "where I'm led". Thirty dirty pieces of silver dangling from tree. Then someone was called to judge, and even he was prone to shrug pointedly in wash of hands returning 'Will' to everyman-- in beg to hear a wise result. Someone else thought of a crown and knew just how to weave thorns so... others had to mark the flesh with the whip of no remorse. Others had to be witness, cheers or tears-- the same release-- others had to follow path and watch the death and birth of peace. Someone with some diligence had to pound the nail through bone. Someone had to stand and pray-- helplessness that cries "atone". Someone wept at suffering, somes of one laughed at the flesh dripping blood born of the sun sucking on a sour sponge begging for reprieve. All these things-- they had to be-- perfection in its symmetry... much too much for just one eye-- the reason we were granted three-- Someone said it was just me-- but I did as I was told. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (06-14-2003 12:49 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad but Judas Iscriot brought his demise upon himself. I enjoyed the read. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
OMG Karen, this is stunning.You carried me captured through the entire write.This is awesome work. Jason |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My oh my.  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Genius |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
K...this is amazing! I am speechless. Into the library for another read later. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Wow...I love reading your words...what a story you weave. I only hope the sorceress of my muse can produce for me in the future a fraction what your does for you. Patricia |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Someone else thought of a crown and knew just how to weave thorns so... others had to mark the flesh with the whip of no remorse. Others had to be witness, cheers or tears-- the same release-- others had to follow path and watch the death and birth of peace. Someone with some diligence had to pound the nail through bone. Someone had to stand and pray-- helplessness that cries "atone". Someone weeped at suffering, somes of one laughed at the flesh dripping blood born of the sun sucking on a sour sponge begging for reprieve. All these things-- they had to be-- perfection in its symmetry... much too much for just one eye-- the reason we were granted three-- Someone said it was just me-- but I did as I was told. ============================= But YOU thought of this poem...this masterpiece of rhyme...and I find it so poetically just that you would write something at this impressive level on your birthday-- for many times I have said you were born to write..that rhyme runs thru your veins. This is brilliance of verse... you are a poet of exception KA  Im still imagining your voice ... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
As a poet, you've got grit! Once more, I salute you. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
All these things-- they had to be-- perfection in its symmetry... much too much for just one eye-- the reason we were granted three-- Yes, Karen, it was all in the plan. Hugs  Ethel |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Someone had to die that day and find the way through agony blinking away the tears of pain to illuminate the path again... |
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NickTofteland Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 74MN, USA |
Your faith burns through your words. Your ways of expression amaze me. Awesome, simply awesome. |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
you are one of a kind. simply amazing |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K: your right . . . he did as he was told . . . this is your most brilliant piece I always felt that way too like they both knew but it had to be amazing - *shaking head* in awe xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
brilliant write! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back to put this in me library... still shaking me mothy head at the grace of this one me twin. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popping in for a quick thank you and a hug. You guys are so kind--it's just overwhelming, and honestly, I am quite often left not knowing what to say...smile? It ain't easy shutting me up either, but you guys sure did it this time!  Thank you. |
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NickTofteland Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 74MN, USA |
Shut you up!? Never! I believe I speak for us all when saying "you must NEVER shut up." Your writing blows me away, I'm still in awe... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
the one that jesus loved... no less... some scholars suggest it was 'set up' -- ah well -- I'm not a gonna go down that path -- not gonna do it. yer pome -- yer thread -- it's good -- and that's good enuff... |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Serenity, my girl? You always fascinate me. I was glad that this one wasn't so far over my head (like some of your work) so I could actually understand it as well as enjoy it. It's very true, and not just in this particular instance, that it's far too easy to pin the blame on a single person... it makes us feel better about history, doesn't it? Nobody wants to admit that it was normal people, like themselves, who turned on Christ... it's too frightening to think of. I love this poem... it's a real slap in the face where it's needed.  My favourite stanza was near the end: quote: I just LOVE it... Brian [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (06-15-2003 10:25 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Now dear Karen, this is the second time today that I cry (first on icebox' outstanding poem "When the old man died I did not cry"). This is WONDERFUL. I confess I have always had such pity for Judas and deep in my heart I know he was forgiven ... Jesus knew he was the one who loved him most...indeed afterwards he could not endure the pain. Oh my God Karen! Judas speaks through you here indeed! .... All things were performed according to the Divine Plan I believe. We all are part of it. I bow to you for this masterpiece. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Truly a masterpiece.... |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
back for one more look... |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
this is stunning. seriously, just amazing. one of the best pieces i have ever read. wow. bravo to you. bravo. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
this lives in rarified air this is cream and it is so ....so true you stab and catch.....the meat it is whatt I am foundering about right now over in every person...in every act there is the balance you have spoken about it.......and just recently the antichrist we do have that that difference in us a mirroredshadow we can think we are doing good but there is always...always.....a dark side many times...we cant even se it..or comprehend that what we are doing contains "evil" it all seems proper sigh this is amazing Karen this IS I wish I had written it you are my Word smile |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
yep, we might have questions of how things happened, but without each person, we would not have what we have...perfectly, brilliantly(to stead ps's word) written... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moth may not know much...but she knows poetry baby...and this is poetry in motion... Do you see how many people have been blown away by this amazing write??? I just love it when the forums proves the moth right |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hmmm....aol gremlins????  |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
ptth, aol gremlins... I know that symptom, it happens with people on MY ISP too. Well, let's send this one for a few more rounds in piptalk!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now that was definitely poetry in motion! YOu make me proud to know you yanno? |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
stunned to silence... I enjoyed each line... very much regards sudhir |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jeez Karen, I don't know how I missed this masterful write from you m'dear. Applauding you! and adding to my library. heart huggies Maree  fate is not just |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
er adding now  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I missed this the first time around... thank goodness for them that visit the back pages.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well now....just look at the date on this one. more Birthday--BRILLIANCE |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
theres nothing you cant write about... this is what I meant (on your post today) by intellectually brilliant... I can only write of what I know... emotions or experience...creek rocks and heartache rhymes...but you...you can put yourself in other centuries, in others minds...the river Rhine...biblical times, to me ... thats the true measurement of being a writer.... youre a poetic outta body experience. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen...I'm glad this was brought back...it's amazing!! |
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