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A New Blond Waitress
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A New Blond Waitress |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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A New Blond Waitress She’s too pretty, this one, long things nicely long, round things nicely round, won’t be a waitress forever and hasn’t been one before. She makes up for it with dimples and blond hair, a chin that shyly touches her shoulder as she takes our order, swings over to the kitchen, sweet from this side too. Before the order’s up, she’s passed a dozen times, knows I’m looking, shows it with a turned-in smile, lips tucked, liking it even though I’m old enough to be...me. My wife hasn’t noticed, but she has. By the time she brings our food she’s smiling before I look, playing tag and winning, jeans tight, riding a shave low under the white halter, skin between just wider than my hand. Now there’s a thought. She’s moving all the time, bringing things, refilling my glass, then the check, a laugh in her voice that hasn’t faded with use.... One last swing by with change. And what will be my tip? Enough. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
my my how the blond takes our eyes away on a journey of mystery, nice write! It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I always notice the waitresses...and they don't even have to be blond...James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
lol, only you, could write it like this.. only you! Its exquisite! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile...a little game of tag and sexual tension. You write it well, m'friend.  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Grins. You put me there watching you, watching her, watching you... Nicely written, Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You only think the wife didn't see...  We let you see... then bring you home. Enjoyed the view... and the grin on your face. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I have to agree with Sunshine...the wife sees these things, you just don't see that she sees. Sounds like you had fun.  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
 Oh yes, Mr. Ed....the wife sees, but so does the waitress. She knows how to get her tips. LOL A good write. I could see you looking and the waitress flirting. LOL Hugs, Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
By the time she brings our food she’s smiling before I look, playing tag and winning, jeans tight, riding a shave low under the white halter, skin between just wider than my hand. Now there’s a thought. So subtle, but I wouldn't bet that you or she is fooling anyone. She's just doing her job, and since the customer always comes first. Uh huh, uh huh.  Fun write~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-03-2003 11:12 AM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Naw, she was completely a rookie... you could see it in the way she handled things. ....but causing every man in the place to get a whiplash, and shyly loving every minute of it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Now here's a thought... I know the feeling of public flirting... it can be bothersome, especially when your significant other is right with you. It's still kind of fun, even if it's a little risky... and it doesn't make you naughty, just daring. Nicely written, Ratleader... I enjoyed reading this. Parasite [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (05-03-2003 07:01 PM).] |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
She doesn't happen to work at Denny's on Sixth street does she??? Oh well... just checking... Great Fun! Richy |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
ROTFL.. Sunshine is right...  Nice introspective write, RL.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - I see that someone has caught someone eye. Now if you could just point the way, I'll pay a visit... BC |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Before the order’s up, she’s passed a dozen times, knows I’m looking, shows it with a turned-in smile, lips tucked, liking it even though I’m old enough to be...me. My wife hasn’t noticed, but she has. Wanna bet? LOL Ratette's just wise enough to know the difference between looking at the menu and placing an order. LOL I love this snapshot of life you've captured and shared... excellent write! *S* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling).... Ed... you captured this in wonderful style... enjoyed. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved this Ed, brought me right there and left me with the fear that Mrs. Rat would look up any second and chop off your head for it..least I hope its your head..ouch |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Rat...it's time to go back there again...tell her you want a "Sheepherder's Dinner"....she'll ask what that is...tell her "It's a little bit of ewe"......then, leave her a good tip if she doesn't slap you.....leave her a great tip if she agrees. Very interesting way with words pal....liked this one... |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
and a BUMP to the top before Mrs. Rat bumps your head with a frying pan! Very visualllll! Sadelite |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I was thinking of this recently... glad your post in Announcements gave me the incentive to pay it another visit... Delightful write! *S* |
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