Me And My Dad, Fishin ( Winds Challenge )

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Open Poetry #23

Me And My Dad, Fishin ( Winds Challenge )

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

0 posted 2002-11-07 10:46 PM

Background:
*About fish
*8 lines
*Rhyme
*Not funny
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Me and my dad,
Always like to fish.
But sometimes it rain
"Please stop" we wished.

We would stay out for hours.
Waiting for a bite
But sometimes,
We'd have to wait til night.

Me and my dad,
Out at the lake.
But sometimes
We couldn’t stay awake.

My dad snoring,
And I’m catching bass
Then he would wake up,
And I would come in last.

Them days were good
But they have gone
We no longer,
Fish til dawn.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

1 posted 2002-11-07 10:48 PM

verrrry off topic, but i enjoyed this due to an old high school theater company inside joke.

about bass fishing.

thanks for the read.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-11-07 11:07 PM

This is a very good poem. Perfect for the challenage

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2002-11-07 11:15 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Chris, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I hope sometime again you can relive these timeless memories with your father and keep this special bondage and memories dear, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Robert Adamson
Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 328
PA/USA

4 posted 2002-11-08 12:30 PM

It makes a heart glad to cherish memories such as these but, to share them is devine in deed. Thank you.

etoodog

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

5 posted 2002-11-08 01:20 PM

Well done! I truly enjoyed this. Thank you.

Kielo

According to statistics, a man eats a prune every twenty seconds. I don't know who this fellw is, but I know where to find him.
-Morey Amsterdam

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-11-08 01:26 PM

Chris, I enjoyed the poem....but what I really liked was that you shared wonderful memories of a good time you had with your Dad. I enjoyed that. The ending was sad, though, and made me wonder why the days were gone !?!

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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