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PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

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0 posted 2003-01-21 12:01 PM

Is it?

Tell me,
is it what you thought?
Or are you surprised, caught?
Were all your dreams misthought?
Do you still seek what you saught?

Tell me,
how many years have you lived?
Who have you loved?
Is this to you a warm hand gloved?
Or unwillingly were you womb-shoved?

Life isn't nearly what I dreamed,
but, yet, in it's own right,
possibly, maybe, yes, interesting.
Is that enough?

Is it?

Never a fear of death in me;
now, curiously, no desire to die.
No warm welcomg of death's mist.
No invite to the mistress.

Life is happening,
and I must go out on top.
So, tell me,
is it? (what you thought)

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-21-2003 12:22 AM).]

PoetryIsLife

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1 posted 2003-01-21 12:02 PM

I know it's different, but, eh....

~Titus

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
--Aldous Huxley

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

2 posted 2003-01-21 12:06 PM

Hmm... Different, yes. I like it.

Very well done, again.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
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3 posted 2003-01-21 12:19 PM

In the 3rd? stanza, that's supposed to be "possible" right? Not pissible lol? And that other thing is supposed to be "hardly"? Hasty in posting this one? I like it anyway

. Good job on this poem, different is a nice refreshing escape from the same.
Great Job!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

PoetryIsLife

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4 posted 2003-01-22 12:43 PM

Ephraim
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since 2002-12-07

Posts 24

5 posted 2003-01-22 08:58 PM

You pose a good question. I myself am not sure as to my answer. But I do know the poem was great. I'm glad I read it.

Ephraim

Jaime

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6 posted 2003-01-23 10:18 PM

I like the poem. I like the questioning, the repetition, the typical human responces, etc, etc...

Lovely.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

[This message has been edited by Jaime (01-23-2003 10:19 PM).]

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

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7 posted 2003-01-24 06:49 AM

This ones got me thinking, Ti. Intriguing and most thought provoking. One thing though - as well as it was written, why did you stop the rhyme? I thought it had a really good thing going there but then it just...stopped. Don't build us up like that!!!! *breathes*

Nice job.

~AF~

"Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal

PoetryIsLife

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8 posted 2003-01-24 08:20 PM

Thanks everyone. I appreciate your comments, my peeps. Raise the roof!

Yes, it's offical, I can be a dork. So what.

Af... I stopped the ryhme because I'm not too big a fan of it, and I was switching gears in the poem, from general to myself, so, I thought it worked.

Thanks again...

*bows out*

~Titus

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
--Aldous Huxley

barbaraj
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since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

9 posted 2003-01-24 09:11 PM

i liked this poem. very thought provoking. i'm a newbie here so i'll have to read more from you. if they are all like this i won't be dissappointed.

[This message has been edited by barbaraj (01-25-2003 10:11 AM).]

WindSong
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since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

10 posted 2003-02-03 09:07 PM

I liked this one a lot. So true...I liked the first two stanzas and the last one or two, i can't remember which one...Aw heck I LOVED IT! Good job...~*~Kirah~*~

I lie all the time - infact Im lieing right now!
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.

xShUgArHiGhx

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11 posted 2003-02-04 01:35 PM

Different is wonderful...jus like ur poem ti

Standing on the edge of the world
Now I don’t want you to catch me
I want you to let me
Stand up here and walk on my own

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

12 posted 2003-02-09 01:19 AM

Titus~
I always enjoy poems that make me think
and this one succeeded in doing just that.
Great job on this.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (02-09-2003 01:20 AM).]

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