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Untitled ( for Mikey's challenge)
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Untitled ( for Mikey's challenge) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It’s easy to forget When you are surrounded By high tech wizards That with wave of their magic Can make the drudgery of mundane Become a blink or less. That the toiled hours spent By faceless millions Represent homes Bread Dreams They have sat With determined will Doing in repetition What so many of us would not And now like tired dribblings From a cracked pen They are to be erased From the pages of day to day Efficiency!!! Cost effective!!! Speed to market!!! Rally round now… And understand the needs Demand you change. Homes Dreams Yourself. It’s easy to forget As I with keystroke Play Merlin |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now one imagines a mundane blink from Merlin, and voila... art! Smiling large smiles here, Cap'n... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very well done...not an odd occurence, though, a well done penning from you! This is about downsizing, right? That's what I perceive when I read. Excellent meeting of the challenge, unique I'm sure! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Keep playing Merlin... we need more of him... nicely penned... regards, sudhir |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Yep, people reduced to numbers. Column black? Keep on the attack. Column red? Yr dead. By the way, Ron, I like that both our poems involve bread in some way.  Thanks for taking this challenge. I loved the results. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I think we need to go fishing, Ron. smile... the backyard looks promising...um, so does the front as a matter of fact. And yanno, this reminds me of something I told a social worker once-- "Do you know how easy it is to end up on the wrong side of this desk?" Sigh. I don't think that YOU would forget the humanity behind the numbers tho. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Layoffs, down-sizing----Numbers! That's what it often comes down to!---statistics! ---human casualties for the sake of efficiency. My heart bleeds for the thousands who are cast aside after years of loyal servic who are no longer able to feed their families and the difficulty they have finding new jobs. Oh, dear, don't get me going! See how good your poem was! Provokes thought and passion! Important piece of social commentary! Linda |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Ron, it is so very terrible, they truly call that technology when many are losing their jobs and being deprived of their opportunities in life, sounds more than de-nology to me! (sad sigh) My heart goes out to all hurt by this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Ok..this one surprised me. It seemed like a simple rhyme but I found a great deal of depth here. I enjoyed it very much!  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
They have sat With determined will Doing in repetition What so many of us would not And now like tired dribblings From a cracked pen They are to be erased From the pages of day to day Cpat, a wonderful twist of words. A great poem. Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood |
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