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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-09-26 08:18 AM

It’s easy to forget
When you are surrounded
By high tech wizards
That with wave of their magic
Can make the drudgery of mundane
Become a blink or less.

That the toiled hours spent
By faceless millions
Represent homes
Bread
Dreams

They have sat
With determined will
Doing in repetition
What so many of us would not
And now like tired dribblings
From a cracked pen
They are to be erased
From the pages of day to day

Efficiency!!!
Cost effective!!!
Speed to market!!!

Rally round now…
And understand the needs
Demand you change.

Homes
Dreams
Yourself.

It’s easy to forget
As I with keystroke
Play Merlin

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-09-26 09:12 AM

Now one imagines a mundane blink from Merlin, and voila...

art!

Smiling large smiles here, Cap'n...

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2002-09-26 11:18 AM

Very well done...not an odd occurence, though, a well done penning from you!

This is about downsizing, right? That's what I perceive when I read. Excellent meeting of the challenge, unique I'm sure!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

3 posted 2002-09-26 11:46 AM

Keep playing Merlin... we need more of him...

nicely penned...

regards,
sudhir

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-09-26 12:26 PM

Yep,
people reduced
to numbers.
Column black?
Keep on the attack.
Column red?
Yr dead.

By the way, Ron,
I like that both our poems
involve bread in some way.

Thanks for taking this challenge.
I loved the results.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-09-26 12:55 PM

I think we need to go fishing, Ron.

smile...

the backyard looks promising...um, so does the front as a matter of fact.

And yanno, this reminds me of something I told a social worker once--

"Do you know how easy it is to end up on the wrong side of this desk?"

Sigh.

I don't think that YOU would forget the humanity behind the numbers tho.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-09-26 01:26 PM

Layoffs, down-sizing----Numbers! That's what it often comes down to!---statistics!

---human casualties for the sake of efficiency. My heart bleeds for the thousands who are cast aside after years of loyal servic who are no longer able to feed their families and the difficulty they have finding new jobs. Oh, dear, don't get me going! See how good your poem was!
Provokes thought and passion!

Important piece of social commentary!

Linda

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-09-26 10:31 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Ron, it is so very terrible, they truly call that technology when many are losing their jobs and being deprived of their opportunities in life, sounds more than de-nology to me! (sad sigh) My heart goes out to all hurt by this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2002-09-27 11:26 PM

Ok..this one surprised me. It seemed like a simple rhyme but I found a great deal of depth here. I enjoyed it very much!

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

9 posted 2002-09-28 07:55 AM

They have sat
With determined will
Doing in repetition
What so many of us would not
And now like tired dribblings
From a cracked pen
They are to be erased
From the pages of day to day

Cpat, a wonderful twist of words. A great poem.

Too early for the rainbow, too early for the dove These are the final days, this is the darkness, this is the flood
L cohen

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