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Iniquity |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State 
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Iniquity Sheathed, her wistful soul weeps Desperate for a hearts resolve Aching for what’s in minds-eye Images she bids to evolve With chance as her only promise And a moment her only assist She grasps for what she sees But cannot reach in the midst Paralyzed with heavy aberration Hopelessness takes its aim So deep with in her dreams It stakes its devastating claim Sorely she drinks her anguish Accepts the poison she’s bestowed And in the belly of torment Her misery slowly erodes Blinded from iniquity that looms Deafened by her silent cries And still her only comfort Found behind forbidden eyes ~Sheri |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Wow, I really enjoyed this. It just flows when I read it. Thanks so much for sharing this, you are a beautiful writer.  |
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kindredlibra New Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 3WA USA |
WOW!! Your muse was really with you here. The imagery your words invokes strikes deep...very moving, haunting & sad. I can feel her despair & torment. |
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Tepok Bopar Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 27 |
Very interesting. I like this. Cheers, Tepok |
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Tepok Bopar Junior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 27 |
oops [This message has been edited by Tepok Bopar (09-25-2002 05:58 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This was a cool poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Moonlight Romeo 
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
It would seem that your muse has found you my friend. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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T Member
since 2000-04-27
Posts 107USA |
I've read this several times now Irie. It's a good one to think about. I like it a lot. T. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Sheri, this is so sadly wonderful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to her and others who feel like this and wish for comfort to come and calm the anguish, this is powerful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sheri, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Miah Thank you so much for such a wonderful compliment! kindredlibra Thank you! I’m thrilled that you were able to feel what I wrote. Tepok Bopar Thank you, and thank you again for your oops!  HeheI’m glad you liked! loner Thank you ….. Moonlight Romeo I’m so glad I fired the old one and brought in new! She seems to be useful, For now anyway. Thank you T I’m so happy you like it! Thank you Noah A wonderful response from you, and many thank yous to you! Thank you ALL for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I appreciate you all so much! ~Sheri |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Sheri, I can only say that I am unable to describe what this piece made me feel. Amazing!!!!!! Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
pretty cool write Irie, smiles to you cuz I said so |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Irie - you write of you well, especially liked this... BC |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A good write. We must take our chances and reach for that which we find alluring and feel enchanting. Sometimes though we pull back one less digit. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"With chance as her only promise And a moment her only assist She grasps for what she sees But cannot reach in the midst" Ah, but you have been reaching deeply. I'm enjoying your new musings. |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Krishankins I think this is a good thing! Thank you so very much! walt Thank you, and I am smiling, because you said so!  Bill I'm thrilled you especially like this one! Not sure if I am writing of me though .... Many thanks to you Bill. RSWells Oh so very true Sir! Then again, better to lose a digit than to never take a chance? Thank you! Midnitesun Reaching deeply for that new muse! I think I'll keep her, she seems to have proven herself well! I'm glad you enjoyed. Again, many thank to each and every one of you! ~Sheri |
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Hearts_Dance Junior Member
since 2002-09-30
Posts 31 |
I found your title interesting so I opened it. I'm not really sure what the meaning is with this poem but I can tell that there is a lot of pain. What ever it is, i felt this was a good poem, even though it's sad. I hope that you will be writing something of cheer, from personal feelings, very, very soon. [This message has been edited by Hearts_Dance (10-01-2002 12:37 AM).] |
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