Open Poetry #20 |
The rain over the sea |
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling to the earth. Oh God we're falling. Falling down to add to ocean's birth. Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling to the sea. Oh God we're falling. Losing shape as Thetis swallows me. Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling shining flames. Oh God we're falling. Ancient sun of fire's drowning shame. Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling. The wind is calling. Oh God we're falling. From beneath the waves. I see her shape of being. The rain can't be felt. From beneath the waves. From beneath the waves. The view that I am seeing. Squall line dislodge kelp. From beneath the waves. From beneath the waves. No one left is fleeing. Dissolution can't be helped. We become the waves of leeing. She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-22-2002 01:50 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling to the earth. Oh God we're falling. Falling down to add to ocean's birth. Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling to the sea. Oh God we're falling. Losing shape as Thetis swallows me. Oh God we're falling. Oh God we're falling shining flames. Oh God we're falling. Ancient sun of fire's drowning shame. =================================== OH how I love when you wail. angst & imagery wrapped in rhyme... Sing us the blues baby..(do ya play the harmonica?) How long can a girl be haunted by you ... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Butterfly Slippers, Nope, but the harmonica plays me! I'm glad y' enjoyed. She said burn ... together. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"From beneath the waves. I see her shape of being. The rain can't be felt. From beneath the waves." The rain can always be felt no matter how deep we go.... *sigh* you write so cool |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I would love to hear this one, reminds me of Bob Dylan actually. Can you hear it? Love that repetition, it works, it really works. ~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Well done, enjoyed this poem very much, thanks for sharing ~HUGS~ Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you all enjoyed th' sea legs. She said burn ... together. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
From beneath the waves. The view that I am seeing. Squall line dislodge kelp. From beneath the waves. You have such a wonderful way with words, Mr.Squirrel....I would like to treat you to some of my special acorn pizza one of these days. that is...if you will be seen with a lowly chipmunk ~ furry rodent hugs Lyra |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Heh heh -- I get along with chipmunks just fine, Lyra. I'd love to. Shall we say that big oak in the back, around 6? She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-24-2002 02:07 PM).] |
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