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| Open Poetry #25 |
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Reunion |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Reunion driving away the luggage behind us our rented car rolls back along the once familiar street they're all still smiling waving from the porch but softer now behind a little haze of rain the house, the street seem smaller greener, rain hazed colors almost right almost how they were so close to how they were how they are smiles from the porch a little rain near the corner the car warming to the job behind us still a wave or two too distant now for faces streetside branches lean across to close the scene the rented rearview posts a note "objects in mirror are closer than they seem" |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
great ending |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...enjoyed the buildup...and yes, the perfect ending. |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this sounded just like my family reunions are. It's hard to leave the cousins and everyone, because the next year some of them may not be there, for whatever reason. . I liked the style you wrote this in, too.....  "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-16-2003 11:37 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I try to vary my style as much as I can and still be true to the needs of whatever subject I'm writing about at the moment. Since I write about a wide variety of things that's not hard, but I pay attention to it too. If I write in one way all the time, I get bored with it myself -- pity the poor reader then! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ [This message has been edited by Ratleader (02-16-2003 11:57 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've been through this moment so many times... but you brought it up close and even more personal... thank you Ed! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done..the ending a line for the reader to ponder..and draw from the whole that which fits their own experience... I enjoyed |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I really enjoy your talent. The writing style and imagery great! I especially like this line: "streetside branches lean across to close the scene" neat concept! Thanks for sharing your poetry with us. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - enjoyed the read from beginning to end, loved the ending... BC |
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RokoRoo New Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 4 |
A beautiful way to soften the most painful part of a reunion. I always hate the "goodbye" part, it makes me cry every time. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi, Roo! Gladda see ya, sweetie! (Ratleader starts a rumor....) ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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