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Open Poetry #25

Rain (a haiku?)

LilTai
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 189
United States

0 posted 2003-02-17 01:30 PM

Rain

We are as the rain
Falling forever in love
Spilling from the clouds

Tai

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

1 posted 2003-02-17 02:05 PM

Very nicely done!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2003-02-17 03:18 PM

I think so...and some don't like to get wet...James

Quiet Acquiescence
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since 2003-02-16

Posts 70
somewhere out here

3 posted 2003-02-17 03:21 PM

Oh that's so cool. Nice job.

~*~me~*~

"Remember, courage is wings."
~*~Heather Francis~*~

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2003-02-17 03:47 PM

Beautiful!

Maree

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2003-02-17 03:56 PM

Exceptional images. Great write.
ThisDiamond

VAS
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since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2003-02-17 04:01 PM

from the words of a friend who has studied haiku greatly, she would say it was a senyru, as haiku do not have metaphor, simile or human element

but it is a fantastic senyru!!! The image is wonderful!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-02-17 04:03 PM

Beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

cinnamongirl
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 217

8 posted 2003-02-17 04:28 PM

Sweet... lovely and sweet. Such a pretty thought!

Thank you- it's a wonderful haiku!!

Love,
Moca

LilTai
Member

since 2002-06-08

Posts 189
United States

9 posted 2003-02-17 05:08 PM

Thanks for reading everyone, I really appreciate it

And VAS, thanks for the information, I didn't know that

Tai

Waterbirdfly
Junior Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 32
China

10 posted 2003-02-18 12:26 PM

What is "Haiku"? Who can translate it into Chinese?If can't,tell me it's Enlish meams by my email,please.

Jason Lyle
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since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

11 posted 2003-02-18 01:33 AM

I like this,well done.
Jason

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