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She's Coming Tonight!.....reposted as response to Kit's Opportunity Knocked |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! I can't believe it's true! I'm acting like a nervous wreck... I don't know what to do! I took two showers and ate three rolls Of Clorets for my breath. She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! My God! I'm scared to death! I watched her for so very long.. Stayed just a step behind. She's never known the love or passion Living in my mind. I've always been her special friend In whom she could confide. But never had the strength to show her How I feel inside. The table's set...the china's placed, The tablecloth is clean. The dirty clothes are underneath The bed to be unseen. The furniture's been dusted and I vacuumed every rug... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Dear Lord, I need a drug! Last week I finally got the nerve To ask her for a date. I knew that she would turn me down But she said that was great! I tried to make it nonchalant To not scare her away. I couldn't let her know how much I've daydreamed of this day. Sinatra's on the cd player... Candles are aglow. Three days I've worked my tail off To make it all just so. The food's cooked to perfection And the wine is nicely chilled... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! I'm going to get killed!!! For weeks I've watched the calendar, Marked days off one by one. There's no way I can get through this... My Lord, what have I done? She's such a queen - I worship her I'm just a simple guy And everyone's in love with her But not as much as I. The toilet seats are down, I hope. There's no hair in the sink. I cleaned the ring around the tub... Soap dish ok, I think. All burned-out bulbs have been replaced, The ashtrays free of butts... She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! And I am going nuts!!! How could I have been so dumb? What was I thinking of? I'm not schooled in those subtle things One needs for showing love. I can't say how much that I care 'Cause that might make her go But if I act too casual Then how is she to know? Will she be wise enough to look Past all my frailties To see the man inside of me Who only wants to please? Or will she think I'm just a guy Who's trying to be nice? She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Dear Abby.....send advice!!! Then, when it's time for her to go, I'll gently squeeze her hand And, if she doesn't squeeze mine back, I'll try to understand. She'll never know my heart is broken. I will just pretend That I'm completely satisfied In being her good friend. Oh, no! The hour is getting late! I'd best do something quick! It might be good to call her up And tell her I got sick! There's no way I can make it through... I'm shivering with fear! She's coming tonight! She's coming tonight! Oh, no! The bell! She's here!!!!! [This message has been edited by Balladeer (01-24-2002 10:40 PM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling wickedly* and I hope she makes the first move because you are just too scared to.... BRAVO!!! I could feel the sweaty palms of this poem. I love it. **big hugs**   Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
HAHAHAHAH I am falling off my chair, and Baladeer you have no idea how much I need these good laughs, It is good for the soul. Oh gosh, how I loved the repitition of " shes coming tonight." I split a gut laughing and these lines"The toilet seats are down, I hope. There's no hair in the sink." HAHAHA we all check those things when company is coming. You really sounded razzled in this poem. I felt it really happening, great write. " Poet" floria Floria |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Oh Michael, I’m rolling on the floor with this one. Amazing how much preparation goes into getting ready for a date. I’d love to see a sequel to this. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
ROFL .... I stood upon your front porch steps, Legs shaking … knees were locked … I raised my hand, then put it down, Too terrified to knock! What would he say, what would he do? Would he just close the door?!!! Oh geez, I just can't take this Nervous wait a moment more! I closed my eyes, I took a breath, I tried to count to ten ... I lost my nerve at nine and so I started back again. First One … Would he be disappointed? Two … Would I be shy? Three …. Should I just turn away? Now four … I want to cry!!! Five … Why did I get that perm? At Six … I stopped to breathe … Seven … Oh my goodness now, I think it's time to leave!!! Eight … Can't find my tic-tacs, so At nine … I grabbed my purse …. Ten! Oh heck, I'm knocking now, I hope that he's seen worse!!! Tap-tap-tap … I waited, Then I tap-tap-tapped once more … I rang the bell and paced until, The latch turned on his door! Ack! I screamed, and turned to run, I tripped and plunked head first, Upside down I toppled, NOW … he's seen me at my worst!  *~* LOL ... now I have to head to dreamland. Thank you for such a wonderfully poetic night Michael ... you have no idea how much I needed this tonight!!!!! Thank you!!!  [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (01-25-2002 08:56 AM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Michael...this is another of your spectacular story poems.... Just make sure you keep those toilet seats down...that really impresses women.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
l love this poem........ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I saw her legs up in the air And then I saw the rest. There was no doubt that I was seeing This girl at her best! But, being quite the gentleman I rushed down to her side I felt so bad for this poor girl I really could have died! She wasn't conscious, I could tell And I was scared to death. Mouth to mouth resucitation Might return her breath So I bent down and pressed my mouth Against hers real tight And felt a stirring in her lips Which filled me with delight! Unfortunately, while I did this Two old ladies passed And when they saw the two of us Their faces were aghast! They ran the whole way to their house Not making any stops Then grabbed the phone with shaking hands And called the frigging cops!! Police car came and there we were.. My girl still half-passed out Her skirt still up around her waist Possessions strewn about. My lips were still pressed to her mouth While breathing heavily.... Before I knew that they were there Those cops were cuffing me!! I tried to make them understand That it was a mistake But they shoved me so hard I thought My back was gonna break! The girl still lay upon the sidewalk Incoherently And I could tell her lack of movement Was not helping me!!! They threw me in the back seat And then drove me off to jail. I'm sitting in the cell now With no cash to post the bail. I only wanted one nice night With someone I adored And now the State is kind enough To give me room and board!!! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Balladeer, What a pair you two make. If I didn't enjoy this so much I'd be green with envy. Just a ton of fun. [This message has been edited by Larry C (01-25-2002 12:36 AM).] |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
ROFL .... this is fun!!! I woke up in a hospital, A bump upon my head; I glanced about the room, And then I scrambled out of bed. Now how on earth did I get here? My head was awfully sore … I wandered 'cross the room And peeked my head out of the door. I saw a man in uniform, Just out and to the right, With doctors, nurses moving 'round, It gave me quite a fright! I felt a draft behind my gown, I got a sudden chill … The paper napkin that I wore Just didn't fit the bill! I searched for my belongings, Dressed myself and grabbed my purse; The bump upon my noggin seemed To throb … was getting worse. I walked into the bathroom, Threw some water on my face, I looked into the mirror At a face I couldn't place.  What was my name? It slipped my mind, My memory was lost … What had I done to land me here? And "who" had paid the cost?? I gathered up my property, Assuming it was mine, And snuck right past the officer, Before he could decline. I ran outside and found a park, Sat down to calm myself, My head was aching awfully bad, No, not my best of health. I opened up the purse and Checked the contents found inside, I found a driver's license, That was "ME" there … un-denied! But "who" was "I"??? I searched for clues, Though nothing came to mind, Until I found a scrap of paper ... Read it line by line. It was a poem … a lovely verse, My thoughts came rushing back … The moment that I saw His signature in white and black! The images came flooding in … My knock ... the door ... I fell! Then hmmmmm ... (remembered something sweet), Then heard a woman yell! Some men in blue had hauled him off, His hands in cuffs ... I think ... Oh NOOOO!!!! I jumped up off the bench ... They took him to the clink!!!! I got directions frantically, And ran toward the jail ... Oh my! I hope my wallet has Enough to make his bail!!!  [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (01-25-2002 09:07 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL...So pleased I waited until morning to read this gutsplitted piece! I wouldn't have been able to calm down and sleep for giggling. Michael as if yours wasn't funny enough, which is was...when I started to read down...well, between you and Kit!! This one is a keeper! I'll be walking around thinking about this story all day. Thank you for the chuckles and also to Kit for her comical poetic responses. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
ohhhhh Balladeer this is sooooooooo adorable cute.....glad you repost that one, but well all your post is worth to read and reread. love it dear Deer  Charisma |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (giggles in delight) Uh oh, is there something in the oven burning? (smiles) Your wonderful words always make me smile, sweet friend, oh dear, I have never been on a date yet and I hope I can get through a night like this OK! (giggles nervously) We all love you so much, sweet friend, you are a delight to us all! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
Very humorous and enjoyable!Nice job! |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
I've read this thread in rapt int'rest It's really very good! This tale of woe-befallen love Is funny, (knock on wood) This "Comedy of Errors" flows And entertains us lots I feel like Andy Griffith watching Juanita and Don Knotts! I hope you two remain happy With love's discovery My pity goes first and foremost To the insurance industry!!! never try to teach a pig to sing |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dear heart I really love this poem it is UTTERLY utterly fabulous. Yes I know I always say that but then you always write to utter perfection. This has always been one of my favourites, and YES it’s true I always say that too. This does hold a very special place in my memory, and even if my memory has more holes than Swiss cheese I remember this one. It is utterly wonderful writing, as always your metre is perfect and the construction is fabulous. A brilliant piece of writing. Between you and Kit I'm giggling like a loon. Wonderful writing the pair of you I’m sorry I simply couldn’t resist doing a poetic reply, forgive me? please He’s Coming Tonight He’s coming tonight it’s our second date Maybe I’d better try not rushing this gate I’ve prepared the dinner everything’s done So how do I move the situation on? Should I act coy and pretend I’m shy No, he’d never believe that barefaced lie Should I offer him wine or perhaps a beer? Hurry up and come, oh the time draws near He’s coming here for his dinner tonight Oh help I want to keep it nice and light I’ve got candles I look better when softly lit I only hope this night will be a hit There’s music playing I’ll keep it quite low And permit the wine and the beer to flow Should I make my move tonight do you think? Oh lord how much should I let him drink? He’s coming tonight and he’ll be here soon Oh my look there’s going to be a full moon Is this a good sign what if he turns odd on me? Perhaps I should change the beer for a cup of tea Do you think the atmosphere is right? What about candles is there enough light? Maybe I should give him a half-hour more Oh goodness I’m nervous he’s at the door Marsha   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 [This message has been edited by Marsha (01-25-2002 09:00 PM).] |
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amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
Oh...my..this i'm having a gala time with...Balladeer and Kit....you guys are great...keep it going... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
What a great story this is...I am following this with avid interest, wondering how she is going to get him out of jail! You two are UNBELIEVABLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A good post as a response...adequate, to say the least...LOL...very good, Balladeer! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
You made me smile with this one and I needed that tonight. I imagine I'd feel exactly the same, though I hope I'd do the laundry rather than stuff it under the bed. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
They took me to a jail cell, Removed my shoes and belt. I guess they thought I'd hang myself As lousy as I felt! The floor was cold beneath my feet I felt it to the bone And, as I looked around, I saw That I was not alone. The group of thugs inside that cell Sent shivers through my skin And I began to realize The pickle I was in. One big guy licked his lips at me My future looked quite slim. I'd hoped to have a date, that's true, But not, of course, with him!!!! They closed around me in a circle.. Someone touched my hair. Some made obscene gestures Blowing kisses in the air. My breath was coming out in gasps My skin was turning pale And then I heard a voice call out, "Hey, kid! You're out on bail!" I flew out of that jail cell As fast as I could go! I saw her standing right outside Beneath the streetlamp glow. I said, "I'm sorry!" So did she! And then we laughed so hard That people passing thought that we Came from the looney ward!! I said, "I have a roast at home That should be black by now And wine that I am sure is warm But drinkable somehow. So, if you'ld like to try again The hour is not too late. I'd hate to miss the chance I had To have you for a date." She smiled, reached up and kissed my cheek Then took me by the hand. She said, "A shame to lose a night So eloquently planned." Then off we walked into the night The problems all had passed. We finally had our first date and It wouldn't be the last! |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
LOL .... Ahhhh Michael! Splendid!  An absolutely priceless ending to this series ... loved it 'deer poet, just loved it! No question that down the road we'll have to pick up where this one left off, lol. I had a pretty rough week this week personally .... and this poetic ping-pong has been a blessing to me. You are such a treasure. You just keep me smiling, and I can't thank you enough for that! Thank you to everyone too, for all of the wonderful comments you've made, and for following along with this little impromptu story. Your sentiments have been so genuinely appreciated. Big hugs to all, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I agree completely! Warmest thanks to you all that join in and follow our silliness. It wouldn't work without you!  Kit...you're the greatest! Thank you for being you |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
The second I saw the title I started laughing, and read three lines and stopped because I didn't want to read it in pieces. Well, I finally got around to reading this whole hilarious sequence of events in poetry and I have to tell you both, I am very proud to know you. You are both fantastic poets and fantastic people. <font face="monotype corsiva">~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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