Open Poetry #18 |
Travel On |
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Travel On _____________________________ One may not reach the dawn save by the path of the night. - Kahlil Gibran - _____________________________ You cannot see the light, my dear until the dark has made you fear until the day is so far away you cannot see the light. Until the dark has made you fear until the day is so far away you cannot see the light though a voice in dark you hear. Until the day is so far away you cannot see the light though a voice in dark you hear you cannot see the light quite near You cannot see the light though a voice in dark you hear you cannot see the light quite near save by the path of the night. Though a voice in dark you hear you cannot see the light quite near save by the path of the night ~ when wrong is suddenly made quite right Now ~ you've reached the dawn. ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 25 July 2000 revised 26 January 2002 |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very nicely done..and so true M |
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sodpossom Senior Member
since 2001-06-15
Posts 723N.C |
So very true and full of wisdom!Very nice! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Yes, yes, in understanding and coping with the darkness first, we will find compassion and our love will grow rich in the end and we will watch dawn forever beacon in the distance, approaching us with warmth and solace! (kiss on cheek) I love it, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This style is wonderful Sunshine, I have been wanting to try it..can't think of the name of it now. Possibly Pantoun? maybe not, I don't really know too much about poetry. I just write it. LOL. great write here. floria Floria |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Karilea, I like this very much. Only if we travel through darkness can we truly appreciate the dawn. I hope each of us will welcome that dawn as it holds the dark at bay. A good day to you! *S* Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sunshine, what a write to hold the night. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now is that ever the truth! However the form you did this in to a dyslexic person makes them think they already read that stanza and keep re-reading the same ones, so this got a really good work over Lovely and full of hope in the advise. <font face="monotype corsiva">~* Carpe' Diem *~ |
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amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
Wow, Karilea, this is lovely... the flow of thoughts in this Form is great....thank you for sharing.... |
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