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In Thought Alone
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In Thought Alone |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
In Thought Alone They had met In a most pleasant way For they both enjoyed A literary sway He liked her words, And she liked his Both were calm types With an underlying fizz If she wrote sentimental He’d reply in kind Seemingly it was to them A pairing of like minds One day she ventured, Do you like to dance? He responded with a smile, saying Just give me my first chance They made a date For a time in their tomorrows Neither knew then Against fate they had borrowed Then days stepped in Became years, and more Still they corresponded By phone, mail and more… Good friends established Hearts in sync to find A relationship had deepened A pairing of like minds Came the day for meeting Perhaps, to spark romance? She queried, he responded, It was time to have that dance They nervously talked a bit, Then a date set, a meeting place He arrived, waiting impatiently The first time in years, to be face to face He said he’d wear a carnation Red in color, like his declare She would come all in white He’d see her at the top of the stairs He arrived to wait, nervously paced And still, no show of white Then he began to worry, as The clock ticked away the night Soon a man came to him Bearing a letter with his name Still no lady, no show of white And his heart began to pain He tore into the missive As quickly, his soul took flight For the letter explained Why no lady in white “Dear sir, thank you for your time For you gave my mother desire, Her cancer had ravaged her soul You kept away the pain of fire, She never spoke to you of this She would never cause you pain, She was sure she would have made The trip, just to say your name, But the cancer took her yester ‘eve, In her papers I found this date, I just want you to know, for you, She would have danced the night away She whispered to me her promise To meet you at the top of the stairs If you look very closely sir, You may see her in the air.” The gentle man, through his tears, Looked upward to a sight, And there, a soul, a vision, Dressed in ethereal white Looked down on him, on his pain A longing in her soul was there, Then she vanished simply, He felt lost in the night’s air One would think it to be true, To not wait until a tomorrow For when asked to dance, don’t Think you’ve a day to borrow… |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Now THIS is the kind of poetry I enjoy reading most of all! A story with an ending and a moral. Well done, Ms Noir! Such a sad tale it is, too. Great imagination here. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
AH, Now this one made my eyes do more than mist. What a perfectly written story, and amazingly vivid imagery. I'll put this into my favorites folder. And now the carpe diem thoughts prevail. |
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Dusty Rhodes Junior Member
since 2001-10-14
Posts 27 |
This is a fantastic woven tale, it goes like a Hallmark Hall of Fame...very well done, and a wonderful read..Thank you |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
great big tears are streaming down my face right this second......this touches so deep... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a treasure. Thank you for this. My perception of truth will somehow never quite be the same..and so I write. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
now we shall dance love heaven shall be our dance floor heaven in my arms Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh...through tears I read this poem and let it seep into my soul.......how often do we lose the chance by putting of the the chance to dance. This poem is total perfection and stunning in its heartfelt message. I love it and it goes into my library. Thank you......I hope I have learned not to put off the dance. **big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Soliel Noir, You live up to your name, but I tip my hat  to your excellent poem. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Sooooooooo heartbreaking, sweet friend, such a powerful morale fills this poem, that we should all accept the invitation when it comes around, for that invitation may eventually reach its deadline, and we must have the courage to take the dance every chance we get. (sad sigh) So sad but beautiful, sweet friend, God Bless You, this is a true classic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Soleil Noir this is wonderful truly it is excellent writing. My sweet sister of heart Kari sent me this yesterday, but yesterday was not a good day to send me sad poems. It's a long story but very boring to anyone who doesn't really know me I've read this today when I'm in a better state to deal with tears. Utterly magnificent You are quite the storyteller well done   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
This is poetry at its finest. You completely captivated me line by line. BRAVO, Soleil !!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes live in the moment while it beacons you...James |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
My favorite song is by Lee ann Womack, and used her line as my signature in Passions for months, "If you get the chance to sit it out or dance, just dance", so you know I loved this too. Life sometimes is far too short to not dance. Darn it, kleenix alert. That my dear lady was one fine story. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Soleil Noir, Beautiful and touching story, you did it so well Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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