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Dear Honey...The Finale.....Kit & Balladeer
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Dear Honey...The Finale.....Kit & Balladeer |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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The holidays are over and the kids are back in school. There hasn't been much snow although the weather's rather cool. My job is still the same old grind - the Chevy still eats gas And I still miss you more than life as I watch hours pass. Italian for the kids tonight....they LOVE Spaghetti-O's! I worked a few hours overtime to buy the boys some clothes. Poor Mikey has a touch of flu. His skin's a little pale. I'll take him to Doc Adam's when I get done with the mail.... I laid awake on New Year's Eve, the letters 'neath my bed, While thoughts of you, and our dear boys were racing through my head; Oh HOW could I have been so foolish? DARN my stupid pride! I grabbed the box of letters, read them all again, and cried. I sealed each one with tears of love, I counted forty-four, I gathered them together, and with purpose, found the door. I raced toward the mailbox, tossed in each and every one, Then cried as I walked home alone . my wait had just begun. I walked out to the mailbox - not one of Life's big thrills Expecting ads and circulars along with monthly bills But, when I opened up the box, I felt that I had died! There were so many letters they had barely fit inside!! I read the letters, one by one, through tears that freely flowed. I followed turns your life had taken....every episode. I read that you still loved me and the children, most of all And, on the final page, there was a number I could call.... I waited by the phone, anticipation drove me mad! I reminisced on all I'd lost, on all I'd truly had. A day went by, and then another; Curse that blasted mail! I thought that they delivered through the rain, the sleet, the hail! I paced the floor for hours, wore a hole into my rug, I wrung my hands in nervous wait, where nails had sharply dug; But just as I had given up - assumed he didn't care . My telephone began to toll . a ringing filled the air . I dialed the number carefully and then I heard it ring. I did the best I could to keep my hand from trembling. It rang one time, then two, then three ... my hopes were getting low And just when I had given up, I heard her say "Hello". Her voice began to fill my ear as she apologized With words of all the love for us she hadn't realized. I felt the torment in her voice - the sadness in her tone And, when she stopped, all I could say was, "Honey, please come home". The moment that I heard his voice, my words began to pour, I didn't waste a breath, for fear I'd lose him evermore; I paused, and there was nothing . dreadful silence on the phone . Until I heard his tender voice, say "Honey, please come home." I dropped the handset, ran about, I grabbed my coat and purse, Was half-way out the door, then stopped! I made a quick reverse . I grabbed the phone from where it fell, and shouted ... "Sorry dear!" "I'm on my way!", then dropped the phone again, and gave a cheer! I sat, tears streaming down my face, because I felt so glad. The boys came in and saw me, then said, "Why you crying, Dad?" "Because your mama's coming home so that's why, I suppose..." Then Mikey jumped and screamed with glee, "No more Spaghetti-O's!!" The boys are sitting, all combed, dressed up in their Sunday best And I'm aglow with knowledge that our love has passed the test. The bell will ring not long from now and it will be my wife Together we'll go forward and begin a brand new life......... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 STANDING OVATION!!! BREATHTAKING!!! ABSOLUTELY BREATHTAKINGLY BEAUTIFUL!!! ENCORE!!! (big hugggsssssss) I LOVE IT, WHAT A BEAUTIFUL POEM OF MATCHMAKING AND THE RETURN OF FAITHFUL LOVERS AND HAPPINESS!!! (smiles) GOD BLESS YOU, SWEET FRIENDS, THIS IS BY FAR ONE OF YOUR BEST YET!!! We all love you so much, sweet friends! (BIG HUGGGSSSSS) You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Kit and Michael, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You know, it takes a lot to bring a lump to this old broads throat...but good lord, you two have done it here. This is absolutely marvelous...you had me mesmerized to every line. This is such a sweet, tender ending, told as only you two story tellers could. Bravo...standing ovation!!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The proper ending...a wonderful collaboration...THIS is what Passions in Poetry is all about...poets...coming together! Kudos to you BOTH! |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Oh my godddd...this is a fantastic ending to the love story. 2 thumbs up!!! You two are a great team. ((hugs to the both of you)) ENJOYED! RP |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
'Deer dearest heart, this is without doubt one of your utter best. And now you’ve made me cry. What is this a conspiracy? I so much less attractive with red rimmed eyes? Hhhmm! But my eyes do look like a field of bluebells that have been washed by the summer rain They don’t but I’m surely allowed some poetic licence. Aren't I? This is absolutely wonderful, I forgive you for making me cry, since these were tears of joy and relief that the star crossed lovers would be star crossed no more.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy You do know this is wonderful don't you? Good it is outstanding  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I have followed you two all through this story. This is a wonderful ending. I love happy endings. Thank you both for sharing this with us. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!! YES!! I LOVE IT!! This is a masterpiece! I knew there had to be a happily ever after here!! I just knew it!!  You two should be very very proud of this, as I believe it was impromtu blending of pens and thoughts. Reminded me much of the stage play 'Love Letters.'I so enjoyed this....please keep us in touch with this 'family' from time to time. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~* A dream is a wish your heart makes... *~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
A happy ending...I can relax now. This has been the most enjoyable series...even more so given it's impromptu evolution. Thanks to both of you...and LohnJohn, for switching those letters! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
wonderful ending! [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (01-02-2002 09:11 PM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Balladeer and Kit, All good things come to an end. And such a good end it is. Bless you both as you have blessed me. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I just love happy endings!! This was great, you guys...really enjoyed the whole series. Maybe you should take it on the road. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Noah...glad you liked it! You DID like it, didn't you?  Tracey...you sweet lady! Thank you for taking your lumps with us.... Sunshine...I agree. That IS what Passions is all about! Thank you for enjoying... RosePetal..thank you! Kit did all the work...I just tagged along. She is awesome! Mushy...At last! Tears of joy!! Thank God! I love your glistening cheeks...thank you!!  SmartChick...and thank you for coming along. We both appreciate your kind words. Thank you... Enchantress...yes, it was impromptu. I just posted a poem and Kit jumped right on it and turned it into a complete story...right off the top of her head. That's talent..... Duncan...thanks for sharing it with us. We had fun and we're glad you did, too! Kathleen...very happy you enjoyed it!! Larry...some things have no ending. We may be back thank you, sir!Martie...good idea! I'll check with Kit...thank you, sweet lady! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Hey you two, this is so awesome. You write so well together. A lovely ending, too. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Mistletoe Angel, Tracey, Sunshine, RosePetal, Marsha, SmartChick, Enchantress, Duncan, Irish Rose, Larry, Martie, and Dee …. A thank you does not seem nearly enough for your wonderful enthusiasm and warmth for this series of poems, but thank you I will … from the bottom of this heart. Your comments have been such a joy to read throughout, and you are all so very much appreciated!  Michael … thank you again, for giving me the pleasure of following in your footsteps, and writing these with you. From the first moment I read Dear Honey, you had me entranced, and I couldn't resist joining in your thoughts. Thank you for continuing the saga to such a delightful end. You are a wonderful friend whom I admire so very much … thank you for these marvelously poetic ping-pong days!  Much appreciation to all, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (01-03-2002 08:02 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kit AND Deer, I love a happy ending just like you've painted here and no more spaghetti-O's that would bring good cheer a poetic melding from Kit and Balladeer thank you both, you do it well, I'm standing up to cheer.  Encore! Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
What Marsha said, only in english Just a wonderful duet. Hearty applause mixed with a BRAVO or six |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit & Balladeer, WOWee You have written an Epopee. |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
First rate poetry prize for both of you for a very sad story brought to a wonderful end through your talent. Melton |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This has been the most awesome series that I have ever read! You two MUST continue to write together... Now I await your encore........ a poem about how wonderful your new life is together.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh yes,,,,,, get me crying. Shoot......how I just love a happy ending....this is a masterpiece that just makes my heart fill with joy. **big big hugs** Writing it together is perfect. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh . . . . . . . dear . . . . . . . heavens! I hope the two of you like the sound of my applause... for you've left me speechless. When I open my dictionary to the definition of "poet"... I expect to see your pictures. *S* Beautiful! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thank you sooooooo much Kethry, Interloper, Sy, Melton, Madame Chipmunk, Startime, and Suthern. We had a lot of fun playing this little ping-pong match, and I'm so glad you all enjoyed it. Your comments warm this heart, thank you ... and hugs to you again Michael. And thank you Larry for your wonderful idea to pull all the links together, that was such a great idea, much appreciated! /pip/Forum53/HTML/000144.html Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thanks to you all for enjoying our work....work? It was fun!! Kit, you are the best! Thank you, wonderful poetess, and anytime you want to rhyme....I'm your guy!! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thank you sweet poet .... anytime you like, I'll be happy to join you again. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
YAY! I LOVE a happy ending. The two of you did this perfectly! I completely enjoyed the path of fate you written out.. Hugs to you both, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Oh Gosh...I cant pick out a line I love, Or a verse I love, I LOVE IT ALL.. CLAP CLAP STANDING OVATION...GREAT WORK. FLORIA |
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