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My Darling-Response to Balladeer's Dear Honey Part 2
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My Darling-Response to Balladeer's Dear Honey Part 2 |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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 This was inspired by Balladeer's Dear Honey (parts 1 and 2) /pip/Forum52/HTML/003009.html /pip/Forum52/HTML/003163.html ~*~ My Darling - Part 2 My dearest, I do miss you so, Much more than words can say, The time has flown, I wonder now, Why I had run astray. It felt like only yesterday, I lingered in your arms, Immune to all the world as I Succumbed to your sweet charms. Oh, how my mind does wander, Back to then ... our good old days, I miss your love and tender words, Your kind and caring ways. You worked so hard to see us through, You tried to do your best … My darling, I'm so sorry That I put you to the test. I should have been quite satisfied, The boys and you were mine, I should have known that I could never Find a life so fine. I missed you when you worked so late, I tired of the chores, I let my fantasies take hold, And thought I wanted more. I didn't know I had it all … I couldn't see the light, I let myself get blinded by My selfishness that night. Too many days we let slip by, No conversation had … Just buried in our daily tasks, And growing ever sad. I know you do not understand, Perhaps, we had a chance, If only we could resurrect Our spark of sweet romance. If only we had taken time, To kiss a time or two .. If only we had talked a while About just me and you. I think of what I've put you through, And cry myself to sleep, I pray the Lord my soul to take, Through moments I am weak. My dear, I know I've hurt you so, Forgive me, if you could, I lie awake each tortured night, Just wishing that you would. Now here I sit on New Year's Eve, Alone and feeling blue, There's no where else I'd rather be, Than sitting there with you. A glass of clear champagne, a toast, Just like the good old days, Oh, how I miss your smiling face, Your warm and tender ways. I'll tuck this letter out of sight, Just like I have my heart, And never will you hear these Tender words that I impart. I don't deserve forgiveness for The pain I've put you through ... But darling, on this New Year's Eve, Please know that I love you. /Kit McCallum [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (12-31-2001 11:55 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, yes, I knew....chapter two....continue on, and let us hear throughout the year, how this weave shall embrace us all in the warm.... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
STANDING OVATION. This poem is absolute perfection. A complete joy to read..I love it. Magnificent. **hugs** HAPPY NEW YEAR  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh yes Kit!! But...those letters must be mailed....I know how you felt with the day to day chores and raising the boys...thinking there must be more to life...oh dear...I am getting carried away again. So well done Kit! Happy New Year....Nancy. *~ Wishing everyone a New Year filled with Peace & Love ~* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
breathtaking! I am/Kathleen/ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Kit, what can I say? I feel as if I looked into a mirror I would see you! Of course, that would make you one ugly female but you know what I mean!! This is wonderful writing once again. Why won't you send me that letter???? You have my address - I don't have yours!  Why did I marry you in the first place??? GEESH! |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Wow this is awesome, you and balladeer are too cute!!!! RP |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Sunshine, Startime, Enchantress, Irish Rose and RosePetal ... thank you so much for the lovely comments. I'm having fun with this! Now Michael ... ROFL @ you! Let's see ... we met at a poetry reading, got married, went on a cruise (missed the part where we had kids  ) and now I've gone and left you? What was I thinking? LOL!  Much appreciation to all ... and Happy New Year!  /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (01-01-2002 12:46 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
you two could run through a lifetime in poetry and still you would not miss a beat and there would still be a tale or two to tell. Kit, fabulous. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! STANDING OVATION!!! OH MY GOSH, I LOVE THIS!!! May this love letter forever be held dearly, and may the memories of true love forever flourish as will true love will eternally fill you with happiness! (kiss on cheek) I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT!!! HAPPY NEW YEARS, SWEET FRIEND!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I know you do not understand, Perhaps, we had a chance, If only we could resurrect Our spark of sweet romance. If only we had taken time, To kiss a time or two .. If only we had talked a while About just me and you. Let me know when the two of you will be coming to my town for a reading. This series is incredible. You're onto something here. The perfect duet. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well you two are sure in tune! I say he might have learned to be just a bit more romantic and loving after doing all that laundry, dishes, and cleaning up Kit, so maybe you should give him a break and at least peek in his window to see the mess all over the place you are missing! LOL, let him stew a bit longer, he is just getting warmed up in knowing what he is truly missing, and when you go back - perhaps he is going to give you a "peck" here and there while you are doing the dishes - it is worth the wait! LOL, and you met at a poetry reading?? Were you two the hosts? Keep going on this it is wonderful and Happy New Year. ~*~ Happy New Year ~*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
KIt You are both making me cry, THis is a wonderful dialogue by two great poets, and we are reaping the beauty of your talents Very well done Liz |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is beatiful, Kit. I love it. To sit and read yours and Balladeers poetry brings me such delight. And, I thank you both for that.
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is just too good, Kit! I eagerly await the next installment.  copyright2001 Lyra Nesius |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
Oh My!!!!!!! What can I say? Two of my most Favorite poetic aquaintances...you have truly outdone yourselves...BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO!!!!! and Kit, anytime I see your name, I am compelled to read whatever it may be...but, never have I ever been disappointed in choosing to do so....Thank you for once again a beautiful piece of work...HAPPY NEW YEAR and GOD BLESS EACH AND EVERY ONE OF YOU! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kit darling girl this is without doubt one of your utter best. I knew this would have me crying So I kept putting off reading it until just before I lay me down to sleep. Absolutely wonderful writing, you and 'Deer are a perfect matched pair, his letters your response, they are the same beat the same pitch. You know that this is utterly wonderful don’t you, the flow and the metre are just perfect, poetry doesn't get more so than this. Fabulous work Kit, and fabulous work 'Deer. Now however it's time to bring out Marsha Spice, I said no more tears. Didn't I? I put my request in nicely. I said please, I said it would be appreciated. Did anyone, ANYONE at all listen? No I don't believe you did. Santa has a list who's naughty and who's nice. I have a list too, a list of everyone who has had me in tears....... And I don't need to check it twice, I know who you are, and SO DO YOU.... It's too late now to be sorry, far too late You'll be sorry now. This doesn't detract from the fact this is truly wonderful    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy But you'll be sorry To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is just wonderful, I so enjoyed reading it. floria |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
Bows head in recognition of excellence. Well written and beautiful indeed. |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
You guys are great. My new Years Resolution is to not cry anymore, thanks for trying to break me down. I think I'll save these beautiful letters, they are full of the hope that I also resolved to give up this year. Good job. Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, Excellent writting could not be better. Love Sy |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kit, What a wonderful story this has been. Thank you...thank you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This story would be astounding if told by one talented writer. *S* That two are doing the telling (and doing it so very well *G*) is testament to both your talents. *S* I don't know if Deer sees your face when he looks in the mirror (though I'm sure he'd love to have you sneaking a smooch! LOL) but I do know that we see a matched set of pure poetic perfection. *S* But which one of you was supposed to supply the kleenex????? |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Thank you so much for the overwhelming response to this series everyone! We had a lot of fun with this impromptu story, and I can't thank Balladeer enough for beginning it with his wonderful letter in response to Poet deVine's challenge ... so thank you too Sharon!  I very much appreciate all of your comments, and wish I could thank you all individually, but my time has been very short the last little while. I do apologize for that. Please know that I am very grateful! Much appreciation and best wishes to all, /Kit I thought I'd pop in a link to Larry's thread, where he pulled all 5 links together for us, including the finale, so I can find these down the road myself. /pip/Forum53/HTML/000144.html |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
You guys are just too good! FANTABULOUS write! Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Awwww ... thanks Interloper, I'm glad you enjoyed! Much appreciated, /Kit |
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