Open Poetry #17 |
Take Me Back To Yesterday.............challenge |
Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Please take me back to yesterday So I can look with childish eyes At Life with wonder and surprise Imagination on display In youthful days of yesterday. Please take me to those golden days When innocence protected me With young invincibility Against the harshness of Life's ways That superceded golden days. The roads were always smooth back then The sun was always high The clouds resembled fairy-tale Castles in the sky. The dark clouds hadn't gathered yet To desecrate my day And love was not an instrument Of heartache and dismay. Please take me back to yesterday Allow me one last chance to live Amid the hope Life had to give Before she took them all away In days that followed yesterday. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Think maybe I could hook a ride? Perfect. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
*sigh* ok |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Deer, you are well named, when you make us laugh you do so with style and panache...but when you make us cry...there is no-one who can compare. *Soft sighs* for this one. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
Your words often move me Balladeer, but none have ever touched me as this has. Splendid! |
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Bec Member
since 2001-02-23
Posts 475Canberra |
Balladeer... Memories of my own childhood... *smile* thank you for helping me to remember. Bec "Poetry and Hums aren't things which you get, they're things which get you. And all you can do is to go where they can find you." |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Kethry's said it best...you're the best at getting us to look inside... and making us all work a little harder to make these days what yesterday was... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
'Deer dear heart, Noody does it better than you, absolutely fantastique, formidable, don't forget the french accent And again you have the tears starting to gather in my eyes, do you have to be soooooooo good at writin emotions? Yes I suppose you must. I shall need one of your jokes now to balance it out. Pretty please I know that into every life a little rain must fall but between you and Keth I've been getting everone's share Truly wonderful my dear friend, you really are outstanding. And no wonder all those other poets are gnashing their teeth in impotent fury, it must be soooooo galling to be consistantly out gunned, out matched and out ranked. Love and warm stuff as always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace St John ch2 v1 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Challange met but I did enjoy my yesterday and Still enjoy today. LOL Wonderful write. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
'Deer - I really like the form, and the change in form with this poem. I can tell you worked on it with skill and some patience, as changing form in midstream like that always sets me back when I write. This is well written. And yes, I'm posting a serious response. Nice job, Miguel. |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Beautiful sentiments! Juanita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh,Balladeer~ Just a great big *sigh* of love for you and your talent~ Love you~ *HUG* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Your words always move me as does this.Beautiful but sad write. You have touched my heart once more. Peaches |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Outstanding! What a wish. Better than millions of dollars, eh what?!? Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, oh, I would love to write something beautiful about yesterday! I wonder if I could? I will try Kathleen (Kay) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Balladeer! Very nicely done! But, you can come to my house and I'll show you the fairies at the bottom of my garden. ~hugs, Nancy~ "A dream is a wish your heart makes..." |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Ah, yes, the sweet time of childhood, the time when everything seems fine and there are no troubles. Im going to miss those times, i am 17 quickly moving farther and farther away from these times. *sigh* yep, but theres only one way to look for me at my age and that is forward. Great poem, i enjoyed it very much Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
That's not fair You already got your book Why do I always have to smile when I see your name in blue? Because I know when I click on it I'll see pretty things written by you Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I've got the bus packed and gassed up....let's go! |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I am ready to go back to yesterday. Can I go too? I love to read your poems. Somehow they seem to make me feel a little more peaceful inside. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*giggling* being the dreamer I am makes it easy for me to be there. I just close my eyes and let the fantasies weave themselves...*wink* want to come with me on my next flight of fantasy, dear Balladeer? **hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all for the wonderful replies. Yesterday is certainly a place many of us would like to see again for a variety of reasons...but life always moves on, doesn't it? I can't answer individual replies here because I'm fighting a losing battle with a migraine but please know I appreciate every one of you....thank you! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hope the migraine's disappeared, 'Deer, 'cause I'm taking this ditty of yesterday, Back to the Top... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is just so touching and sad, excellent expression as always, Michael! And, here's a big ole hug for you I need my cutie pattootie feeling better soon! Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
My yesterdays were not always so sunny or bright, so I'm sure happy to share some of yours tonight. Well done. |
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Rogue24 Member
since 2001-12-01
Posts 111Ontario, Canada |
Quite a verse! Wow! It's been quite a day of memories, a day unlike the norm. Words, although small in size can sometimes have the biggest effect on a heart. Thank you for this write! It is truly inspiring to express myself on paper. CheerS! Ter. Alone in the dark, through my thoughts comfort I do seek, through my words I find peace. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I wish you could go back to yesterday Mr. 'Deer!!! You have a way with words as always!!!!! Bridgette |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
And love was not an instrument Of heartache and dismay. It does seem to be a tool of hurt these days. I enjoyed this reminisce of yesterdays more subtle and caring ways. Challenge well met and expressed. Sincerely, Regina |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*SIGH* YOU are soooooooooooo amazing with words and it's not fair that you always got me *sighing*, think you only write for me to make me sigh right..... ok....ok.....this one is superb as usually ((hugs)) Charisma [This message has been edited by Charisma (edited 12-09-2001).] |
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