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For I Have Borrowed Death ... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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For I Have Borrowed Death ... ~*Marge Tindal*~   Shoulder-cloaked and shrouded hidden shadow of surmise For I have borrowed death to wear in end's demise Burn of candle - short of wick end of light that comes too quick Stalk of walk in corridors end of life - evened scores Into opening of death's cavity steps dead-soldiered march of me Regimented dementia of rhyme I have borrowed death ... one last time ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Marge---It's 3 something. The crickets just stopped chirping. Horror movies the only thing on TV. And now this! Where are the babies smiling while sitting in buckets? Sorry, hope you get my humor here. Intense poem. Burn of candle - short of wick end of light that comes too quick Stalk of walk in corridors end of life - evened scores I've been pondering these same thoughts. Though, with more concern for moments left unresolved. It's good to know I'm not the only person awake in what sometimes feels like a very small world. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Duncan~ When Poe comes calling - he wakes up the dead~ Oh ... no horror shows, please~ Those things scare the bejeebers out of me~ Small world, indeed~ Thank you for the intense company~ I'll look for adorable babes-in-a-bucket tomorrow~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Life is short... Live it to the fullest... Write while you can... You certainly do that to the utmost, m'friend..  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I like this...and I like the way you have woven the feel into such a few words... very nicely done... not one of us escapes the "darker" side of ourselves forever... your penning here has captured my attention this morning as well as shown me another side of your talent... good work!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
jeepers creepers...turn on a light  very cool POEm here my dear.... love the vocab ....and the chill of bone impact  that last verse is like the boogey mans calling card  very cool indeed Margie-girl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan~ Thank you, sweet lady~ I try ! CPatHair~ I have this little muse that insists on bring me new fodder~ Not my first 'dark' and probably not my last.  Thank you for your comments. JanetMarie~ Tee-Hee @ you ! That raven just kept flapping his trap ! *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Marge- This one likes my 'dark' side VERY much! I love the feel of this one... "Burn of candle - short of wick end of light that comes too quick Stalk of walk in corridors end of life - evened scores" Yep...definitely took me to a very dark place... but I liked it there...LOL!  Way cool write, my friend! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marge, This is an excellent sorrow. Words good enough to borrow. LOve and kisses. Sy |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Wowsers Marge ... chills are thrills ... and I'm looking over my shoulder |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Yak, reading this just before I go to bed, storm is blowing, trees making all kind of noises and I'm all alone here Well I'll have to keep the dogs with me Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ That sneaky little Ayrasela keeps me in the 'dark'~ Glad you like it, hon.  Seymour~ Thanks, dear friend~ Rex~ Glad you're keeping that backward glance~ I hear that's where the dark comes from~ Thank you for the comment. Titia~ But .. you have no fear ... for you dwell in the cave of the good dreams~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
I wish I had read this one before it got dark outside.... Burn of candle - short of wick end of light that comes too quick Several parts almost give the feeling of a spell being cast This one has sent me to my corner to ponder life, but sometimes it is good to look into the darkness....thanks for the glimpse Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Very intense indeed! I've never felt quite so close to death as I felt while reading this poem...Poe has certainly awoken! I want to see the babies in buckets smiling too! Hugs my friend Cindi |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Dan~ Hmmmmm ! Now 'dark' isn't really 'dark' until it's 'dark', is it ??? Recognizing a 'spell' is a good thing~ Thanks for the read and reply~ Cindi~ Just for you and Duncan - /pip/Forum50/HTML/003396.html With BIG SMILES~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You turn corners so easily, Marge, with no fear of bumping into walls...well done! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ LOL ! As I said to Vicky ... 'then why do I have all these lumps on my forehead ?' I appreciate your thoughts~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Marge, this "old" Mother is peeking around the corner before taking another step! Me and the darkness don't work. So as I read this I will think twilight...twilight... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
whew...hope it wasn't me walking over your grave! Dark poem from you Marge...and yep, I get it. sigh, with thanks and hugs. |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
marge, you write of the dark very well! |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Marge, what a deep poem but oh so cool! Sauni @~~~>~~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MotherEarth~ LOL ! Just keep the lights on ! Serenity~ *HUGS* Chelsea~ Thank you so much. Saunni~ Just a little poetic s t r e t c h i n g ! Thank you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow, so Marge the Mighty Care Bear can actually write dark poetry? I didn't doubt it, but it's wonderful to see! I like how this was kept brief, it left a lot of room for feeling. Italics in the last line were creepy, wonderful. The tone... you did everything with the tone of this, a very casual and unusual rhyme, and a lot of other little things that you combined to make this completely perfect. A thrill, Miss Tindal, and my favourite poem from you that I've read. I'm placing it squarely in my personal library. Will read more. Ciao.~Allan They call me a madman, but I'm not mad at anyone. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Jeewillikers! Dark is right! But...if you squint, and look real close the picture becomes two fat, adorable little bunnies about to kiss, and no one can tell me any different as it is bedtime! Good golly gouls girl, this was a goodie!*~If you can't say anything nice about someone, don't say anything at all*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Allan~ What a thoughtful reply. Thank you for the depth of your read. *Hugs* ~*MightyCareBearMe*~ Mysteria~ Go to bed ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Oh my....what a poetic stretching here...it also shows how talented you are. (((warm hugs))) Charisma |
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