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Michael
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0 posted 2001-06-09 03:11 AM


STARGAZER


Imagine in mind as I will in verse,
All the stars of the universe.
Shining bright through the vastness of space
In symmetric harmony and grace.
Majestic mystery in multitude,
A red and blue romantic interlude.
Projecting promise with prominence,
In a twinkling aura of omnipotence.

Look closer now, let's pick just one;
One solitary sibling sun.
From the realm of time, space, and dimension
Unexercised by human apprehension.
An incandescent, gleaming glare --
A glowing white and red pocket of air,
Giving warmth and light and life and love --
Gliding boldly through the sky above.

Look closer now, beyond this star,
To where we watch it from afar.
Exquisite splotches of green and blue
Proffer such a delicate, peaceful hue.
And round and round and round she goes,
Yes, where she stops, nobody knows;
Lost in the merriment and mirth
Of our beloved planet Earth.

Look closer now, into the awestruck eye
Of a child staring, blindly, at the sky.
The celestial bodies ablaze fashion
A brilliant spectacle of inspiring passion.
But how long till he begins to ponder?
-- Till the innocence begins to wander?
-- Till the days one by one pass him by
Without so much as a glance to the sky?

-- Till every night in dark discord
He heralds dispassion's reward?
-- Till demands and deadlines of life disperse
The very wonder of this universe?


Michael R. Anderson


But dreams of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned and die.


EAP

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 06-09-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Tovi
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1 posted 2001-06-09 03:33 AM


A very powerful ending in this writing.  I applaud the writing and the message.  
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2 posted 2001-06-09 07:25 AM


Michael, this is filled with so much truth. We stop gazing far too soon. As always, you write magnificently!  
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3 posted 2001-06-09 07:57 AM


I truly enjoyed all these lines. Just came back from a visit on your homepage, and it's really a nice one. will return to read more.

Charisma

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4 posted 2001-06-09 09:27 AM


This is amazing, and every rotation pulled me in a little closer!
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5 posted 2001-06-09 09:43 AM


Michael,
An excellent write, enjoyed it all.

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6 posted 2001-06-09 10:33 AM


Michael...I swear I just grin after reading you sometimes...kinda like watching someone hit a home run when ya just KNEW they were going to slam the ball outta the field! You are good, m'friend. Damn.
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7 posted 2001-06-09 12:42 PM


Imagine in mind as I will in verse,
All the stars of the universe.
Shining bright through the vastness of space
In symmetric harmony and grace.
Majestic mystery in multitude,
A red and blue romantic interlude.
Projecting promise with prominence,
In a twinkling aura of omnipotence.

Look closer now, let's pick just one;
One solitary sibling sun.

From the realm of time, space, and dimension
Unexercised by human apprehension.
An incandescent, gleaming glare --
A glowing white and red pocket of air,
Giving warmth and light and life and love --
Gliding boldly through the sky above.
================================
Look closer now, into the awestruck eye
Of a child staring, blindly, at the sky.
The celestial bodies ablaze fashion
A brilliant spectacle of inspiring passion.

But how long till he begins to ponder?
-- Till the innocence begins to wander?
-- Till the days one by one pass him by
Without so much as a glance to the sky?

-- Till every night in dark discord
He heralds dispassion's reward?
-- Till demands and deadlines of life disperse
The very wonder of this universe?
====================================

Imagine now ... someone reading you for the very first time...
the awe ... the wonder ...the impress of your rhyme.
Each poem shimmers ... like an emerald star,
each word glimmers ... proof of the gifted poet you are.

In your rhymes ... your unending light shines
Read between the lines ... witness a visions sign.




**though my words could never do yours justice...
this gift of sheer poetic beauty in the wrappings of a repost is a reminder that in the archives of this forum are endless treasures to be discovered and rediscovered.

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8 posted 2001-06-09 02:49 PM


(sad sigh) It is so very sad how innocence is lost in the youth of our world as they grow up; their imaginations and dreams soar as they look upon these stars that reflect what they are destined to be, but they seem to be drawn to peer-pressure and the stars just seem to dim. (sad sigh) I pray the future is filled with plenty of stargazers, holding true to their hearts and letting love conquer all. (sigh) Such a beautiful view of wisdom! You have such a beautiful heart, dear friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Michael
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9 posted 2001-06-09 09:22 PM


Tovi, Nice to meet you, I'm glad you enjoyed.  I will look for something of your soon.  

PdV, I honestly wish I knew more of the, (cringing to say), rules of poetry before  I wrote this piece.  It seems so rough on the edges - and yet I have no desire to change it for fear of obsuring the message.

Charisma - I have a home page...LOL  Oh, yeah - haven't been there in a good while myself.  Glad you enjoyed.

Sunshine & Sy, thank you both so much.

serenity, I'm in serious need of a new bat I think - I posted this one just because I can't seem to touch the level of emotion I used to show in pieces like this... Anyone selling their muse?

Janet, you humble me and you give me far too much credit - and besides, the archives are just there to make me feel old aren't they?

Noah, your words hit the nail on the head.  I too hope the futire is filled with stargazers - for once we as a whole stop dreaming, is all not lost, then, already?


Thank you all for the kind replies.


Michael

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10 posted 2005-08-24 10:54 PM


How on earth do you get to that deep part of your soul like this?  Amazing!

I shall wait until dark to gaze up and thank you once again Michael.

Best to you and yours.

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