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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2001-05-17 08:55 PM

Smiles, Aluminum Smiles

Nineteen sets of lips
could go either way, up,
or down
depending on whether
I could deliver
a little smile, or frowns

nineteen 8.7 year olds
on the average, were
waiting to see
if I could be
a poetic deliver-er

we talked of style,
of form, content
I shared a poem or two
of poets here, who gave
consent,
an A+ to all of you.

I never asked if a grade
be given
to the words of mine
for I was blessed by
something more,
their smiles,
all quite sublime.

These last two days
I spent upright,
a wannabe poet
in the spotlight
for children are so
honest, you see,
and their truths come
easily.

Instead, I asked for a
word, one that
described them best,
came home last night,
homework as my test.

Take their name,
and somehow claim
this word of theirs
to poem
a line or two
and I was through
each name some
lines would own.

I worked acrostic,
Haiku, free verse,
and a little Senryu, too,
some did rhyme,
some were cute,
but one, I believe,
came right through…

three little girls
likened themselves
to the spirit of a horse,
and as I was a little girl
once, I knew their
heart, of course.

When I called the
three girls up,
and shared with them
their poem,
one little girl,
with aluminum smile,
why my heart
she surely owned.

Her smile was delightful
her eyes were bright
her grin reached from
ear to ear,
she had wanted so
a horse poem of her own,
and her dream
was very near.

Would I disappoint? See her
smile disappear into frowns?
here is the poem that she heard,
I don’t think I let her down…

to be long in limb, a spirit wild
to run with wind, my tail in flight,
my lungs take in good clean air
to gallop along, no earthly cares,
to neigh in delight, have no fear,
would all be a young colt’s dream,
but to have a friend, one like you
to brush my flank, comb my mane
then you could give me a good name
and I will be your filly, fine,
and you would be a girl called Mine.

Did Christmas come early?
Was it the Fourth of July?
the sparks that flew
from her eyes so blue
caught my heart in cry!

These last two days
will live in my heart,
in this poet wannabe…
for in my mind,
in tintype frame,
an aluminum smile I’ll see.

Poet deVine

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1 posted 2001-05-17 09:01 PM

AWWWWW....so the poetry reading was good?? I'm so glad..this is wonderful! I felt like I was there.

Sunshine

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2 posted 2001-05-17 09:17 PM

Yes, deVine one...the readings went very well! The kids were very excited that I could take one word [athlete, awecome, cool, cute, funny, happy, loveable, play, smart, tall, football, cats, dogs, horses] and either make a poem of them, or for them. Their teacher was quick to comment if I had "captured" them, and captured them we did, in two ways...one with their smiles, and the other, of course, with pictures!

It was a wonderful day. I think one of the best comments was their teacher saying that they would carry this on to next year, and "remember when...."

Thanks!

Nan

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3 posted 2001-05-17 10:17 PM

What a wonderful way to spend a couple of days... I'm smiling...

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2001-05-17 10:26 PM

Karilea~
DELIGHTFUL !
And it's probably hard to tell who got the most out of it !
YOU or THEM !

What a special treat !
Thank you for sharing this with us.
*Hugs* ... sweet poet !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

thepoeticplumber
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since 2001-05-15

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5 posted 2001-05-17 11:30 PM

It was a delightful experience for you, and I am glad. You are an extremely talented poet. Thanks for sharing it all. Roger

Sunshine

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6 posted 2001-05-17 11:40 PM

Nan, somehow I think I need to thank one of the A+ queens...you giggled them right into my work...

Marge....so you caught the "ewwww" did you?....and they STILL gave it an A+.....

Roger, it was an extreme experience....just a week ago, I spoke to some 70 adults on a professional level....I think with the kids, and poetry?...I was a little more nervous!

Thank you ALL for reading!

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-05-18 12:27 PM

What an experience! Is there anything more special than a child's attention, and especially listening or creating poetry? Good for you, for setting an example and giving them a feeling for the art. Your poem was wonderful about your experience, and I thank you for sharing it.

~*~ I write ~ Therefore I am ~*~
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Eloise
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since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

8 posted 2001-05-18 12:59 PM

And you too shall carry this on to next year and "remember when" What a wonderful experience you had.

Kit McCallum

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9 posted 2001-05-18 05:00 PM

Oh, can you see this big smile from across the miles? It sounds like you had a marvelous time Karilea!!! And such a wonderful visual you left me with ... aluminum smiles, loved it.

I'm so glad both they AND you had a grand time!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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