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Bloodletting On the Horizon of a Once Balanced Ground
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Bloodletting On the Horizon of a Once Balanced Ground |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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An ache or catch of breath, Heart thumping to the beat of a careless tone, And blood rushing with quickness. Flushing cheeks and red glow. Eyes mist and pink with sealed temper. Tremble of hands, Wrung in anticipation, Trying to snuff out a lit fuse, With control and determination. Sighing to carefully reject bottled steam. One careless tone, Ignites another, Then voices clash, In an animated jaw clenching rage, And in the end, The battleground is bloody, Bodies litter the ground, Their ghosts still at unrest for a problem unsolved. The stains on the once beautiful peaceful grass, Reminders that war accomplishes nothing in, But casualties and unmendable hearts. Bitterness for the two and their plight. What did it prove in the end? When she tried to speak in his kingdom, While he didn't listen, And she failed to just walk away from the first wound? Tears fall for the pain, But they accomplish nothing, For anger blocks a once giving spirit. Ego soars higher with foolish pride, But pride must have its fall, So the slaying of a giant is at hand. Two sides Well argued. One union, Cracked and splitting wider, Beneath the trembling quake of communication. Four feet, Two in the dark, One grounded in some hope, And another already out the door, Tugging the one lost in futility, With mad and desperate pleas, To join it and find true happiness. still d-i-s-c-o-n-n-e-c-t-e-d I am bound by this, you see...to become Night's sole mistress, and I am jealous in my endeavours for his attention. [This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 04-25-2001).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Wow, Jenn - I'm seeing an entirely different side of you from the budding new poet of a couple of years ago... Keep exploring within yourself, my friend... You're doing an awesome job..  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i echo nan i echo nan very good and entertaining are the words i find |
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Marq Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 222 |
Nice post Temptress. I always enjoy your insights. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes, this is indeed another side of you that I've not seen. . . you're really getting inside yourself with every writing. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dennis Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 235Indiana |
This is like a war zone!!! dark..vivid....wow! |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
What does it take to get all four feet in the door? We can only wonder and hope that we can find it. But, the battlefield is no place to look for it. It must be in the heart. Excellent poem. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Nan, Thanks for stopping by, Lady.  I love your comments on my work as usual. I'm trying..I really am. Walt, Thank you. If they can entertain or do anything else for the reader, then I am amazed. Marq, Thank you..as I always enjoy yours. ((HUGS)) Sven, Yes, I suppose we have to get inside until there is no more before we move outward and really start to grow in our writing though. Thanks for reading. Dennis, Thank you. I'm glad you liked it as it was my intent to paint that picture. Passions Voice, Sometimes the battlefield is all that is left, and perhaps that thought should offer some realization, eh? Thanks for reading and thanks for your thoughts. |
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